Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart and bar graph provides information about the strength of young individuals attending different kinds of dance classes in a town of Australia.
Overall, there are four different dance academies, and nearly 50% of the youths attend private studio. and the least youths are in community hall.
To commence with, Individuals which are under the age of 11 learning ballet dancing are about 600, and 300 more between the age of 11-16. In tap dance about 450 youths under 11 attending, and 400 youths age of 11-16. 300 young people attending modern dance classes under the age of 11, and more 500 youths between the age 11-16.
On the other hand, 18% of the total youth from the town attend classes in community hall and other places, 24% individuals attain classes in their school after the school ends, 10% of the youths attend college based studios to learn dance, and Lastly, 48% of the individuals attend dance classes in private studios.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover both parts of the visual data, mentioning the locations of dance classes and the types of dance classes by age group. However, there are several inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that '300 more between the age of 11-16' for ballet, whereas the chart shows 300 total for the 11-16 age group (a decrease from 600 under 11). Furthermore, the overview is rather simplistic ('four different dance academies' instead of class locations), and key comparisons are missed. This performance aligns with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing different aspects of the charts, and a concluding body paragraph. However, logical progression is sometimes hindered by abrupt transitions and faulty referencing, such as 'and nearly 50% of the youths attend private studio. and the least youths are in community hall.' Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes incorrectly (e.g., 'To commence with', 'and more 500 youths'). Paragraphing is attempted but lacks unified thematic control. This warrants a Band 5 score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a basic vocabulary range suitable for describing simple statistical information ('youths', 'attend', 'private studios', 'modern dance'). However, there are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'strength of young individuals' instead of 'number of young people', 'attain classes' instead of 'attend classes', and 'college based studios'. Less common lexical items are attempted but lack precision. Spelling is generally acceptable, but lexical limitations restrict the score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text contains a mix of simple and attempted complex structures, but frequent grammatical errors impede smooth reading. Examples include missing auxiliary verbs ('Individuals which are under the age of 11 learning...'), incorrect prepositions ('age of 11-16'), and awkward word order ('In tap dance about 450 youths under 11 attending...'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also problematic, with run-on phrasing and fragmented ideas. Grammatical control is weak, making Band 5 the appropriate descriptor.
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