Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts illustrate about four different locations and three forms of dance classes attended by the number of young individuals in Australia.
Overall, most of the dance classes were attended in private studios, which recorded the highest proportion, followed by school halls. Ballet dance was the most popular among teenagers, while modern type of dance was mostly attended by children under 11.
The private studios has recorded the highest proportion, accounted for 48%, which afterthat followed by the school halls that represented 24%. Moreover, community halls and other were at 18%, while college-based studios contributed pnly 10%.
The ballet dance was quite popular among teenagers and almost 600 students attended this dance type, while only 300 students who aged under 11 participated in the same dance. In addition, modern dance type was famous among the children aged under 11 and accounted approximately 530 students, while only 300 students who were between 11-16 attended the same dance type. Moreover, tap dance classes were almost equally attended by both age groups with a slight difference in number od st
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting information on both the location of dance classes and the types of dance classes by age group. Key features are selected, such as private studios being the most popular location at 48%, and comparisons are made between age groups for different dance styles. However, there are notable data inaccuracies in the body paragraphs: the text states that 'Ballet dance was the most popular among teenagers, while modern type of dance was mostly attended by children under 11,' which directly contradicts the visual data (where modern is 520 for 11-16 and ballet is 600 for under 11). Furthermore, the response trails off abruptly at the end ('number od st'). These inaccuracies and the incomplete ending prevent the score from reaching higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is structured into an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for the two charts. Cohesive devices are attempted (e.g., 'Overall', 'Moreover', 'In addition'), but some are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'which afterthat followed by'. Paragraphing is present and logical, attempting to group information by chart. However, referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall progression suffers due to the abrupt cutoff at the very end of the text. Paragraph transitions feel somewhat mechanical rather than naturally flowing.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, with attempts at less common words and phrases such as 'proportion', 'contributed', and 'participated'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'The charts illustrate about' (unnecessary preposition), 'attended in private studios' (should be 'attended at' or 'held in'), and spelling/typographical errors like 'pnly' and 'od st'. The range is sufficient to convey the basic information, but lexical control is inconsistent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses ('which recorded the highest proportion') and subordinate clauses ('while modern type of dance was mostly attended'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The private studios has recorded'), missing articles, and awkward phrasing ('students who aged under 11'). Punctuation and sentence completion are also compromised by the unfinished final sentence. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader.
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