Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given pie chart illustrates how the young citizens of Australia are currently participate in dance classes location wise.
overall, The Largest proportion relates private studios which is accounted for 48% and the smallest proportion accounted for only 10% to college-base studies.
As Per the given pie chart popular dance classes conducting at private studios significantly that are accounted for 48%. Besides the 24% represents for school halls after schooling which the second large proportion.
Nevertheless, The community halls and other places are accounted for 18% that are represents on third level of pie chart. Furthermore the smallest proportion accounted for only 10% which are related to college-base studios.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it contains only 109 words. Furthermore, the student completely omits half of the visual data provided in the prompt, focusing exclusively on the pie chart representing the location of dance classes while ignoring the bar chart showing the types of dance classes by age group. Although the main features of the pie chart are correctly identified—such as private studios accounting for 48% and college-based studios accounting for 10%—the failure to address all parts of the task and the severe under-length penalty restrict the score in this category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response attempts to use paragraphing, with an introduction and several body paragraphs, but the organization is disjointed. There is an over-reliance on basic cohesive devices and awkward transitions, such as 'As Per the given pie chart popular dance classes conducting at private studios significantly that are accounted for 48%.' The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall progression of ideas is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of sophisticated cohesive links between the paragraphs. Paragraph breaks are used, but their internal structure lacks logical flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on basic phrasing to describe percentages ('accounted for', 'smallest proportion'). There are noticeable lexical and collocation errors, such as 'young citizens of Australia are currently participate', 'college-base studies' instead of 'college-based studios', and 'school halls after schooling'. While the student manages to convey basic data points, the range of vocabulary is restricted, and these errors occasionally cause strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most complex or attempted complex sentences contain major errors, such as 'popular dance classes conducting at private studios significantly that are accounted for 48%' and 'the second large proportion.' There are persistent grammatical inaccuracies regarding verb forms, prepositions, and word classes throughout the text. Although simple ideas are occasionally communicated, the high frequency of errors noticeably impedes understanding in several places.
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