Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This chart illustrates the information about locations and different kinds of dance institutions for young people in a town in Australia who are currently attending it.

Overall the private studios has the highest number of 48%. The school halls (after-school) has the 24%. The community half and other location of dance classes has the 18%. The other is the college-based studios has the 10%.

Based on the pie chart, the private studios of ballet has the highest percent of number of students which is under 11 by age group. The community half and other has 11-16 of number of students by age group. The modern age group has the lowest number of students under 11.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count of 150 words, standing at only 115 words, which severely impacts task completion. While the student attempts to present an overview by mentioning percentages from the pie chart, the information is inaccurately reported and mixed up. For instance, the writer confuses the data from the pie chart and the bar chart, stating incorrectly that 'private studios of ballet has the highest percent of number of students which is under 11'. The overview lacks a comprehensive summary of the main trends, and significant data points are misread or omitted. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response is divided into short paragraphs, including an introduction and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. The student attempts to use transitional phrases such as 'Overall' and 'Based on the pie chart', but mechanical and faulty referencing hinders readability. For example, sentences like 'The other is the college-based studios has the 10%' are awkwardly structured and lack logical cohesion. Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall arrangement fails to guide the reader smoothly through the information, resulting in a disorganized and fragmented presentation.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms directly lifted from the prompt, such as 'chart', 'students', 'locations', and 'dance classes'. There are notable lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as referring to 'community halls' as 'community half' and misusing terms like 'dance institutions'. The student demonstrates almost no ability to use less common vocabulary or paraphrase the prompt effectively. These frequent lexical inadequacies and inaccuracies place a heavy strain on the reader and reflect a limited lexical range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The writing contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences with repetitive subject-verb patterns (e.g., 'The private studios has...', 'The school halls has...'). There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('the private studios has', 'the community half... has 11-16'), missing prepositions, and incorrect verb tenses or forms ('who are currently attending it'). Complex sentence structures are absent or poorly formulated. Although meaning can sometimes be extracted, errors are frequent and pervasive throughout the short text.

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