Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart and the accompanying table illustrates the location and categories of dance classes attended by youngsters of an Australian town.
Overall, it is clear that majority of individuals prefer private studios. Which is followed closely by the school halls. Furthermore, Ballet classes can be seen is the most popular among youngsters under 11. Additionally, a large number of students at the age of 11-16 years old attend modern dance classes.
Regarding the location of dance classes in Australia, private studios accounted for the highest share at 48%. Meanwhile, the school halls represents the mere at 24%, which is followed closely by the comunity halls at 18%. lastly, just 10% of young people join college-based studios.
Turning towards type of calsses, 600 students under the age of 11 perfer ballet classes, However, just 300 students under the age of 11 join modern dance classes and those who are 11-16 year old join ballet dance classes. Similarly, aproximately 450 students under the age of 11 and almost 400 students of the age 11-16 attend tap dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student addresses all parts of the task by reporting information from both the pie chart and the table, providing an overview of the main features and making relevant comparisons. For example, the student correctly identifies that private studios account for the highest share at 48% and highlights specific age-group trends for ballet and modern dance. However, there are minor inaccuracies in reporting the data; for instance, the phrase 'the school halls represents the mere at 24%' is awkwardly phrased and slightly inaccurate regarding the precise wording of the chart data. Furthermore, some data points, such as the mention of students aged 11-16 joining ballet dance classes, are slightly confused in their synthesis. Overall, the response covers the requirements adequately, placing it firmly in Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organized into clear paragraphs, beginning with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs dedicated to location and types of classes respectively. Cohesive devices are used to signal progression, such as 'Overall', 'Regarding', and 'Turning towards'. However, there are issues with sentence boundaries and cohesion; notably, the sentence 'Which is followed closely by the school halls.' is a sentence fragment that incorrectly punctuates a relative clause. Additionally, spelling and typographical errors in cohesive markers like 'comunity' and 'lastly' (uncapitalized) slightly disrupt the flow. Progression is generally logical, but these mechanical cohesion errors pull the score to Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms such as 'proportion', 'share', 'attendees', and 'age group' (though some are less varied). Attempts are made to use less common vocabulary like 'youngsters', 'accounted for', and 'approximate'. However, there are several lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'represents the mere at 24%', 'perfer' (misspelling of prefer), 'calsses', and 'comunity'. Spelling errors like 'aproximately' also occur. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they reflect a Band 6.0 level where vocabulary control is sufficient but inconsistent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, using relative clauses ('that majority of individuals prefer private studios') and introductory prepositional phrases ('Regarding the location of dance classes'). However, there are noticeable grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement and article issues ('the majority of individuals', 'the school halls represents'), sentence fragments ('Which is followed closely by the school halls.'), and incorrect comma splices or conjunction usage ('perfer ballet classes, However, just 300 students'). Because errors in grammar and punctuation occur frequently alongside complex structures without completely obscuring meaning, a Band 6.0 is appropriate.
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