Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This chart graph illustrates the destination and different kind of dance classes and the youth idviduals take the these classes in australia. overall the higest percentage of dance classes in australia are private studio and lowest percentage is college based studios . Hoeever there are several type of classes by age group the students whom age is under 11 the student of this age on the top in ballet and theage of eleven to sixteen is on the rise in modren group.
however, community hall percentage is 18 and school halls is 24 percent the scxhool hall percentage is lower then private studios and the college based studio is lower then community halls .
by age group the number of student in ballet the under 11 greoup ratio is high on 600 and the 11 to 16 age group is lower .
in tap and modern group 11 to 16 age group is higher number .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt by reporting information on the location of dance classes and the types of classes by age group. An overview is provided, stating the highest and lowest locations, such as 'private studio' at 48 percent and 'college based studios' at 10 percent. However, the response contains significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student claims that for the under 11 age group, ballet is 'on the top in ballet' with 600 students, but misinterprets other trends or presents them in a very fragmented and confusing manner. Key comparisons are attempted but lack clarity and full development, placing this response at Band 4.5 to 5.0. It meets the minimum word count requirement, but the overall task fulfilment is limited by poor data handling.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing and mechanical structure. Although the student uses transition words like 'overall', 'however', and 'by age group', their usage is often repetitive and mechanically forced. The sentences run together without clear logical progression or punctuation separation, creating a stream-of-consciousness effect. Referencing is frequently unclear (e.g., 'the student of this age on the top in ballet and theage of eleven to sixteen is on the rise in modren group'). There is no clear, logical organisation of the two distinct charts, resulting in an overall arrangement that is difficult to follow. This aligns closely with Band 4.0 to 4.5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is extremely basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words directly copied or poorly paraphrased from the prompt ('dance classes', 'age group', 'percentage'). There are numerous spelling errors ('idviduals', 'higest', 'Hoeever', 'type', 'modren', 'scxhool') and word-choice errors ('destination' instead of 'location', 'youth idviduals take the these classes'). The vocabulary is barely adequate to convey the message, and errors frequently strain the reader's understanding. This performance sits firmly at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of run-on simple sentences joined incorrectly by conjunctions or lacking punctuation entirely. There is a complete absence of reliable complex structures. Grammatical errors are dense and frequent throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the college based studio is lower'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and severe punctuation failures. These errors frequently cause strain and difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar score at Band 4.0.
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