Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart demonstrates the information on the location and different types of dance classes for adolescents in a town in australia at present attending

Firstly, the most number of the people are going for dance classes in private studios is 48% and it is highest from overall. Moreover, students who are studing in school they manage their dance session in school halls after school is 24%. Meanwhile, Other youngsters going to community hall & other for their dance classes is 24%. In addtion, the lowest amount of location for dance classes is collage based studios is 10% it is lowest from above data in town of australia

Overall, the highest number of location is watch in private studios and the lowst is catch atcollage based studios for dance classes in town of australia. School hall have minimum number of youth for dance. the secound lowest is coomunity hall & other

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The student attempts to report the main features of the visual data, specifically noting the percentages for the pie chart representing the location of dance classes. However, the response completely misses the second chart regarding the types of dance classes by age group, which is a major part of the input. Furthermore, there are inaccurate data reports; for instance, the student states that school hall attendance is 24% and then writes 'Meanwhile, Other youngsters going to community hall & other for their dance classes is 24%', which misreads the community halls figure of 18%. While an overview is attempted in the final paragraph, the omission of half the task data and inaccuracies in reporting place this response firmly in the lower band categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response is divided into rudimentary paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'Firstly, the most number of the people' and 'In addtion, the lowest amount of location'. The referencing and links between sentences are frequently faulty, leading to a disjointed reading experience. The concluding paragraph attempts a summary ('Overall, the highest number of location is watch...') but suffers from severe mechanical cohesion issues and repetitive phrasing, hindering clear progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and spelling errors throughout the text (e.g., 'studing', 'collage based', 'watch', 'lowst', 'coomunity'). Expressions such as 'the most number of the people' and 'lowest amount of location' demonstrate a limited lexical range and poor collocation awareness. There is an inability to use less common lexical items accurately, and spelling mistakes (such as 'australia' uncapitalised in places) are noticeable and occasionally impede understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple or faultily constructed complex sentences. There are frequent, heavy grammatical errors, such as 'is 48% and it is highest from overall', 'students who are studing in school they manage', and 'is watch in private studios and the lowst is catch atcollage based studios'. Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing periods and commas. These persistent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader and mean that error-free sentences are very rare.

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