Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustrate the location of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
The private studios have attending the 48 percent dance classes. The school halls atending 24 percent dance classes and the community halls making 18 percent and most 10 percent college-based studio respectively .
The table illustrate the students by his ages. The ages between 11 to 16.
In modern 500 students which are above 11 and under 16 attending the dance classes In tap 400 students are above from 11 and 450 students which are under 11 attending the dance classes and In ballet 300 students who is 16 years old attending the dancr classes and 600 above students can attending the dance classes
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover both parts of the prompt, mentioning the location percentages (e.g., 'private studios have attending the 48 percent') and some data from the age groups (e.g., 'modern 500 students'). However, the data is frequently misreported or confused (e.g., stating '600 above students can attending the ballet classes' when the chart shows 300 for 11-16 and 600 for under 11). Furthermore, the word count is only 123 words, falling significantly short of the 150-word minimum requirement. As a result, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The essay lacks clear overall progression and logical paragraphing. The introduction consists of a single sentence with a grammar error ('The pie chart illustrate'), and the body paragraphs are disjointed and repetitive. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the awkward transition 'and most 10 percent college-based studio respectively'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making the relationship between the ideas and the charts difficult to follow. Paragraphing is inadequate, resulting in a disorganized structure that impedes smooth reading.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The lexical range is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary related to the prompt, such as 'dance classes', 'students', and 'location'. There are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'have attending the 48 percent' and 'the community halls making 18 percent'. Spelling mistakes also occur, such as 'dancr' instead of 'dance'. While the vocabulary is adequate to convey a basic topic, noticeable errors cause difficulty for the reader and restrict the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple, poorly constructed sentences. There are persistent and severe grammatical errors throughout, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie chart illustrate'), incorrect verb forms ('have attending', 'can attending'), and missing prepositions or articles. Complex sentences are rarely attempted, and when they are, they are structurally faulty. These frequent errors heavily distort meaning and strain the reader's comprehension.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.