Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The figure illustrates the geography and different genres of dance classes young people in Australian town are attending nowadays.
Overall, most young people are taking their dance classes in the private studios. Ballet is the dance type that is popular among children under 11 whereas old children like modern the most.
Private studios are hosting most young People for dance(48 %) while the college based studios are training the least children(10 % only) for dance classes. School halls account for 24%(second-most) to the total, in contrast community halls and other contribute 18% to the total.
Tap is almost equally famous in both age groups (almost [redacted phone] students). Ballet is popular among children under 11 ( 600 students), while it is unpopular among students of age 11-16(300 students) . In Contrast modern is famous among students 11-16(approximately 500 students) however it is not popular among the younger students (300).
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student attempts to address both parts of the visual data by describing the location of dance classes and the types of classes by age group. An overview is provided, noting that private studios are the most popular location, and identifying general age preferences for ballet and modern dance. Key features and comparisons are reported, such as private studios hosting 48 percent of students compared to 10 percent in college-based studios, and the contrasting popularity of ballet and modern between the two age groups. However, the response falls slightly short of the minimum 150-word requirement, containing 148 words. This minor length penalty prevents the score from reaching a higher band, though the content itself covers the main trends adequately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organised into coherent paragraphs, beginning with an introduction and overview, followed by body paragraphs dedicated to the location data and the type/age data respectively. Logical progression is generally maintained. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall', 'while', 'In Contrast', and 'however'. However, referencing and transitions can be a bit mechanical or abrupt, as seen in phrases like 'whereas old children like modern the most' and the disjointed sentence structures in the final paragraph. Paragraphing is adequate, but the overall flow could be smoother to achieve a higher band.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms related to data reporting and dance classes, such as 'geography', 'genres', 'hosting', and 'proportion'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with mixed success; phrases like 'old children' are unnatural, and 'unpopular among students' is somewhat repetitive. There are also occasional awkward collocations, such as 'training the least children for dance classes'. However, the vocabulary used is sufficient to communicate the main features and comparisons clearly without impeding the reader's understanding.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including comparative clauses and prepositional phrases. Grammatical control is variable. There are several noticeable errors, such as missing articles ('in Australian town', 'to the total'), awkward preposition usage ('training ... for dance classes'), and spacing/formatting issues with percentages and numbers (e.g., '(48 %)'). Despite these errors, the meaning remains generally clear and communication is not severely impeded. The majority of simpler sentences are accurate, placing the response comfortably within the Band 6 descriptor.
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