Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart and bar chart shows the location and types of dance classes young people in australia are attending.
According to pie chart roughly 48% students use private studios for dance class meanwhile 10% use collage based studios . One fourth students attend school halls for the dance classes and remaining 18% uses commnity hall etc for dance cl;asses.
From this we can get summary that most students use private studios for the dance classes and least uses the collage based studios.
Types of dance classes attended by young people vary due to age Ballet dance class is largely attended by under 11 years old and approximately 600 students and barely 300 students attend this class who are older then 11 .
In tap dance also students who are younger then 11 years have majority but not as dominant like in ballet .
In modern dance classes the older students are dominant majority they 500 plus students and under 11 barely make 200. This is information presented by bar chart graph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the main features of both the pie chart and the bar chart, providing correct data points such as the 48% for private studios and the breakdown of dance types by age group. An overview is present, stating that private studios are the most popular and college-based studios the least. However, the development is somewhat limited and the structure is fragmented into short, disjointed sentences. Furthermore, there are minor inaccuracies in reading the bar chart for tap dance, where the student claims under-11s have a majority when the chart shows 450 for under-11s compared to 420 for older students, which is a close margin rather than a dominant one. Overall, the task is adequately addressed to meet the Band 6 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response attempts a logical arrangement by dividing the information into the pie chart details and the bar chart details. However, the paragraphing is poor and unconventional, consisting of very short, single-sentence paragraphs (e.g., 'From this we can get summary...', 'In tap dance also...'). Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes mechanically applied, with limited use of linking words. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'In modern dance classes the older students are dominant majority they 500 plus students'. Progression is hindered by the choppy formatting and lack of cohesive ties between the paragraphs, placing it firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying basic statistical information using terms like 'pie chart', 'bar chart', 'location', and 'types'. However, the range is limited, and there is noticeable repetition of basic words such as 'students', 'dance class', and 'studios'. There are also several spelling and word-form errors, such as 'collage' instead of 'college', 'commnity' instead of 'community', and 'cl;asses'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with inaccuracy or incorrect collocation, restricting the lexical score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple sentence forms and basic complex structures. However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the text. There are multiple punctuation and capitalization errors, such as missing capital letters for proper nouns like 'australia'. Sentence structures often lack necessary prepositions and articles (e.g., 'According to pie chart', 'roughly 48% students', 'older then 11'). Run-on sentences and missing verbs also occur, as seen in 'In modern dance classes the older students are dominant majority they 500 plus students'. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 descriptors.
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