Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given bar chart elucidates information about location about of dance clasess . The chart compare different categories and present the data in number or percentages .
Overall, it is clear that there are noticeable among the categories shown in the chart. In addition, some categories show some fluctucation by followed increment as well as decrement wheares for some casess they remain stable .
According to the chart, the first main activities private studios 48 % to other compare. The following by second activities College-based studios 10 %. Furthermore the third activities School halls (after-school) 24 % . The show a clear comparison among the categories . It is evident that the activities Community halls and other 18 % .
They types of dance classes (by age group) first Modern 11 to 16 500, Under 11 300 clasess . The second dance class Tap 11 to 16 420 , Under 11 440 by age group . The third dance class Ballet age 11 to 16 300 group , Under 11 600 class in group, Futhermore, all the data suggest that there is no stability in all the avctivities .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt, mentioning the location of dance classes and the types of dance classes by age group. However, the information is presented in a very disjointed and confusing manner. For instance, the student states 'the first main activities private studios 48 % to other compare', which fails to clearly report or compare the data accurately. Furthermore, the figures for the age groups are jumbled together without a coherent overview of the main trends. While some data points are mentioned, such as private studios at 48% and ballet under 11 at 600, the lack of clear reporting and accurate comparison keeps this response at Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is severely disrupted by poor sentence structure and lack of cohesion. Devices are either missing or misused, such as in the sentence 'In addition, some categories show some fluctucation by followed increment as well as decrement wheares for some casess they remain stable.' Referencing and referencing ties are frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal organization within paragraphs lacks a clear, logical structure. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and spelling errors (e.g., 'clasess', 'fluctucation', 'wheares', 'casess', 'avctivities'). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'studios', 'percentage', and 'categories', but struggles to use them accurately in context. Less common lexical items are largely absent or misused. Due to the frequent errors that cause strain for the reader, the lexical resource is graded at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of fragmented or poorly constructed simple sentences. There is a complete lack of control over complex sentence forms, and almost every sentence contains severe grammatical errors, missing verbs, or incorrect word order (e.g., 'The chart compare different categories and present the data in number or percentages', 'The show a clear comparison among the categories'). Punctuation is also erratic. These frequent errors heavily distort meaning and impede communication, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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