Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts provide information about the dance classes and the types of dance classes attented by young people in a town in Australia.

overall, private studios are the most common location for dance classes, while college-based studios are the least popular. In terms of dance types ballet is the most popular among children under 11, Whereas modern dance is the most popular among those aged 11-16.

According to the pie chart, almost half of the dance classes, 48%, are held in private studios. School halls are the second most common location, according for 24% of classes. Community halls and other locations represent 18%, While only 10% of classes take place in college-based studio.

The bar chart show clear differences between the two age groups. Among children under 11, ballet is the most popular, with approximately 600 students attending classes. Tap is choosen by around 450 students, While moden dance has about 300 students. However, The pattern is different among thosed aged 11-16.

Overall, younger children tend to prefer ballet, While older students show a stronger preference for modern dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response satisfies the requirements by addressing all parts of the visual data prompt, reporting the main features, and making relevant comparisons. The overview captures the highest and lowest locations and the age-related shift in dance preferences. The student successfully reports figures such as 48% for private studios and approximately 600 students for ballet in the under-11 age group. However, some parts of the task are slightly more developed than others, and the final paragraph unnecessarily repeats information already stated in the second paragraph, showing a slight lack of extension and balance characteristic of a response straddling bands six and seven. To move higher, the student should ensure all data points are integrated smoothly without repetitive summary statements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to group information logically by chart type into separate paragraphs. However, cohesion is at times faulty and mechanical. There are repetitive transitional words and punctuation issues, such as the awkward capitalization in 'Whereas modern dance' and 'While only 10%', and the abrupt ending of the fourth paragraph leaving a dangling transition 'However, The pattern is different among thosed aged 11-16.' Furthermore, the opening word 'overall' is uncapitalized. Paragraphing is present, but the logical progression between paragraphs is slightly hindered by redundant overview remarks placed at both the beginning and the end. To improve, the student needs more flexible and accurate cohesive devices and smoother referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'proportion', 'represent', and 'preference' (though some are misspelled or used with minor inaccuracies). There are several noticeable lexical errors including spelling mistakes ('attented' instead of attended, 'according' instead of accounting, 'choosen' instead of chosen, 'moden' instead of modern, 'thosed' instead of those) and minor word-choice slips. While these errors do not severely impede communication, they prevent the writing from achieving a higher band. To reach a higher level, the student must eliminate spelling errors and demonstrate more precise word choice and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as introductory dependent clauses ('According to the pie chart, almost half...') and relative clauses. There are some grammatical errors and punctuation slips present throughout the text, including capitalization errors ('overall' at the start of the second paragraph, 'Whereas', 'While', 'The pattern') and missing articles or prepositions in phrases like 'college-based studio' (should be plural). However, these errors are relatively infrequent and rarely impede communication, allowing the reader to follow the intended meaning without difficulty. To achieve a higher band, the student should use a wider variety of complex structures with greater control and eliminate basic punctuation and capitalization mistakes.

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