Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
It is discuss location of dance classes. The dance classes attend community hall and private studios, school halls, college-based studios, ballet, tap and modern provide a highest performance in students.
On the one hand, discuss the location of dances classes percentage. The community halls 18% approximately school halls after-school24%. while the college-based studio 10%, private studios studios highest 48%.
On the end hand, types of dance classes(by age group under 11 and 11-16. The ballet number of students 11 age 600 students, while the 11-16 age 300 students. The tap under age of 11 and 465 students, basically age 11-16 students 430. The modern students age 11 and 300 students, while the 11-16 students 540 number of students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response addresses the task only partially and falls short of the minimum length requirement, containing 141 words instead of 150. While the student attempts to cover both charts by mentioning the locations and the types of dance classes by age group, the information reported is often inaccurate or incomplete. For example, data points such as 'tap under age of 11 and 465 students' do not accurately reflect the visual data. The overview is weak, and the response lacks a clear, well-developed summary of the main features and comparisons. To achieve a higher band, the writer must ensure the word count requirement is met, present accurate data directly from the charts, and provide a clearer overview of the main trends.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The organization of the response is very basic and lacks a clear overall progression. Although the writer attempts to divide the information into paragraphs using transitional phrases such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the end hand', these cohesive devices are misused and mechanical. Paragraphing is poorly controlled, and sentences are disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical development of ideas. Referencing is often unclear, resulting in a confusing structure. To improve Coherence and Cohesion, the writer needs to group related information logically, use appropriate and natural linking words, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, representing a limited range that is only minimally adequate for the task. The writer relies heavily on copying words directly from the prompt, such as 'dance classes', 'location', and 'students'. There are noticeable errors in word choice, form, and collocation, such as 'It is discuss location' instead of discussing, and awkward phrases like 'private studios studios highest 48%'. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To reach a higher band, the student should expand their lexical repertoire by using a wider variety of synonyms and less common vocabulary relating to data reporting, while ensuring accurate word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple, fragmented, or poorly formed clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing verbs, incorrect verb forms ('It is discuss location', 'The dance classes attend'), missing prepositions, and improper article usage. Complex sentences are generally faulty and lack control. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and distort the meaning in several places. To improve, the writer needs to work on basic sentence construction, ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct verb tenses and auxiliary verbs, and reduce the frequency of grammatical errors.
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