Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the given chart illustrates us about, the 3 types of dance classes that are being attented by young people in a town in Australia on different locations

By overview of graph, it can be clearly seen that ballet is the most preferred dance style being adapted by children under 11 years, while modern dance style is preferred by children whose age are above 10 and less than 17.Private studios comprises half of dance classes location in the city.

There are 3 different types of dance location in the city.1st there are private studios which comprises half of dance classes around 48%, follwed by school halls where dance classes are held after school that carry around 24% of dance classes,afterward community halls and other which holds 18% and in last college-bases studios which holds the least around 10%.

there are 3 types of dance Ballet, Tape and Modern. Around 600 children under 11 participate in ballet dancing and 300 children who are aged among 11-16. Tap participation rate is stable, around 450 children under 11 and less than 450 aged 11-16 participate in tap dancing style, afterward modern dance which compromises 520 children under 11 and 300 children age from 11-16.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the main parts of the task by reporting data from both charts, presenting an overview and some key figures such as the popularity of ballet for children under 11 and private studios as the top location. However, the development is uneven. The overview contains inaccuracies, such as stating that modern dance is preferred by children aged 11 to 16 when ballet actually leads in total numbers across groups or misinterpreting age categories. Furthermore, some data points are misreported or vaguely described, such as claiming tap participation is 'less than 450' for the older age group when the chart shows it at approximately 420. To reach a higher band, the response would need to provide a more accurate and fully extended overview that clearly highlights the most significant trends without factual errors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response shows a basic, coherent overall arrangement with an introduction, an overview paragraph, a body paragraph on locations, and a body paragraph on types of dance. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by mechanical or repetitive cohesive devices, such as starting multiple sentences with 'there are' or repetitive sequencing words like 'afterward'. Paragraphing is attempted, but sentence boundaries are occasionally blurred by poor punctuation. Referencing is also somewhat unclear at times, making the logical flow disjointed. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to employ a wider and more flexible range of cohesive devices naturally, ensure smooth transitions between ideas, and maintain a clear, logical progression throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for communicating the basic information, attempting some less common items such as 'comprises', 'participation rate', and 'preferred'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors in word choice, form, and spelling, such as writing 'attented' instead of 'attended', 'Tape' instead of 'Tap', and 'college-bases' instead of 'college-based'. Additionally, some phrases are awkward or unnatural, like 'illustrates us about' or 'dance classes location'. These inaccuracies indicate a limited range of vocabulary control. To move to the next band, the student must expand their lexical repertoire and eliminate basic spelling and word-choice errors by ensuring correct collocations and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty or awkwardly constructed. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in last college-bases studios'), incorrect prepositions ('on different locations'), subject-verb agreement issues, and poor punctuation and capitalization. For instance, sentences often run together without proper punctuation. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited range of grammatical structures. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of complex structures with higher accuracy, paying closer attention to punctuation, articles, and basic sentence mechanics.

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