Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the pie chart illustrates the information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending and also there are different type of age group that attending the classes.
overall, There are mejorty of people in the Australia attend classes in private studios about (47%) of total, as well there are arround (24%) going to school halls after school for dancing. Moreover second last location af dance classes are happens in community hall and other where arround (18%) of total. at last (10%) of total attend their classes in collage-based studios.
there are three types of dance classes are doing in these locations. Ballet,Tap,Modern these are the type of dances and also there are two type of age group one is under 11 and another is 11-16 age group. the number of age group of under 11 is more than age group of 11-16. in Ballet the maximum numer of students are in under 11 and in modern type of dance classes maximum number of students are of age group of 11-16. in tap dance classes there are average population of both age groups like (55-45%).
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting data from both charts regarding locations and types of dance classes. An overview is attempted at the beginning of the second paragraph, mentioning the majority in private studios and the figure for school halls. However, some parts are developed more fully than others; while the location data is broken down with percentages, the data for dance types and age groups is described rather vaguely without utilizing the exact figures provided in the visual data. For instance, the number of students taking ballet or modern dance is not precisely quantified, leading to under-developed comparisons between the two age groups.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The text displays a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to group information into logical paragraphs, with the first body paragraph focusing on locations and the second on types and age groups. However, the progression is sometimes hampered by mechanical and repetitive cohesive devices, such as starting multiple sentences and clauses with phrases like 'and also there are', 'as well there are', and 'at last'. Paragraphing is also slightly irregular, with the introduction merged into the first sentence of the response. Referencing and logical transitions between sentences require smoother integration to ensure a clearer flow of information.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying basic statistical information using terms such as 'illustrates', 'majority', and 'proportion' or numbers. However, the range is limited and there are notable word choice and spelling errors, such as 'mejorty' instead of majority, 'arround' instead of around, and 'collage-based' instead of college-based. The student attempts less common vocabulary, but these inaccuracies and spelling slips occasionally detract from the precision of the report, though they do not seriously impede overall communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response employs a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, such as relative or coordinate clauses, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent errors with articles, prepositions, and plurals, including 'the information on' instead of simply 'information', 'different type of age group' instead of 'types of age groups', and 'dance classes are doing' instead of 'are conducted' or 'take place'. Punctuation is also weak, with sentences running together or lacking proper capitalization at the beginning of paragraphs and sentences, reflecting frequent minor errors.
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