Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie chart shows proportion of childerns going to private studios, college-based studios, school halls after school and community halls & other placesfor their dance classes in an Australian town. The bar chart illustrates the number of students as per their age, who are learning ballet, tap and modern dance.
Overall, almost half of the young people are attending private studios, while college-based studios are being attended the least. Furthermore, ballet dance is quite famous among the students under 11, whereas modern dance classes is popular in students age 11 to 16.
Most of the youth in a town are learning dance in a private studios with 48%, then comes the school halls with 24%. In addition, 18% of the childrens are going to community has and other location for dance class and 10%goes to college-based studios in one town in Australia.
Moreover, the number of students under 11 attending, ballet, tap and modern dance classes are 600, about 450 and 300 students respectively. In contrast, the number of modern, tap and ballet dance learner of age 11 to 16 are about 520, 420 and 300 childrens respectivelly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by presenting an overview of the charts and reporting the main features with accurate data points. The pie chart and bar chart are both covered, with correct references to the proportions and student numbers, such as 48% for private studios and 600 students for ballet under 11. However, some aspects are developed more fully than others; for instance, the comparison between age groups could have been extended further to reach a higher band. Overall, the information is relevant and clearly drawn from the visual data, satisfying the requirements for this level while showing some features of more fully developed responses.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, overview paragraph, and body paragraphs that separate the two charts. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader through the data, such as 'Overall', 'Furthermore', and 'In contrast'. However, referencing and cohesion can occasionally feel somewhat mechanical or repetitive in structure. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the pie chart details from the bar chart statistics, and logical progression is maintained throughout the text, allowing the reader to follow the information easily.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying the statistical information about dance classes and student numbers. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'proportion', 'illustrates', and 'respectively'. However, there are notable lexical errors and spelling mistakes, including 'childerns' instead of children, 'community has' instead of halls, and 'respectivelly'. These errors do not impede communication, but they reflect a limited control of word forms and spelling that keeps the score at this level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and comparative structures. There are several grammatical errors present, such as 'dance classes is popular' (subject-verb agreement), 'private studios with 48%' (prepositional choice), and missing articles or incorrect plurals like 'childerns' and 'dance learner'. Nevertheless, these errors rarely impede communication, and the meaning of the sentences remains clear. The mix of structures shows an attempt at complexity, but control over accuracy needs improvement to reach the next band.
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