Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This pie chart illustrates the types of dance and location in a town in Australia young people are attending.
Overall, 11- to 16-year-old people are attending different types of dances in different locations. Firstly, if we talk about the locations of dance classes, school halls cover 24 percent of people after the school, while the college-based studio has a 10 percent audience out of one hundred percent.
In the location of private studios, 48 percent of the people are present to attend a dance class, while the rest of the people go community halls and the other location which is approximately 18 percent of people out of a hundred.
By the age group section and types of dance classes, there are some different numbers of students that charts show. For ballet dance 600 students are under the 11 years old and half of the students are available for ballet dance above 11but under the 16.
Furthermore, charts show two other types of dance they are tap and modern. 410 people are interested in tap dance who are above of 11, but the under 11 are more interext then above eleven, the audience of under eleven in tap dance is 450.
Lastly, modern dance has 810 total people, 510 are above 11 reat of the 300 are under 11.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers both parts of the visual data—the pie chart and the bar chart—attempting to report the main features. However, the information is partially addressed and suffers from inaccuracies in the data cited, such as stating '410 people are interested in tap dance' when the chart shows approximately 420 for 11-16, and calculating a total for modern dance as 810 instead of 820. While an overview is attempted, it remains quite vague ('11- to 16-year-old people are attending different types of dances in different locations'). To reach the next level, the student needs to select and accurately report key trends and comparisons more clearly, ensuring that data figures closely match the visual source without mechanical listing or calculation errors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is a basic attempt to organise the response into paragraphs separating the charts, using transitional expressions such as 'Overall', 'Firstly', and 'Lastly'. However, the progression of ideas lacks clear overall flow, and referencing is at times clumsy, such as 'the other location which is approximately 18 percent of people out of a hundred.' Cohesive devices are used rather mechanically and repetitively. To improve in this area, the writer needs to ensure that sentences within and across paragraphs follow a more logical sequence and that cohesive devices connect ideas smoothly without sounding repetitive or awkward.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is minimally adequate for the task, but the range is quite limited and repetitive. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'audience out of one hundred percent', 'people are present to attend', and spelling or typing mistakes like 'interext'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items, but they are often handled inaccurately. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical repertoire, use precise topic-specific terminology for data reporting, and ensure correct word forms and collocations to prevent communication strain.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple clauses and basic complex forms, with attempts at complexity often resulting in awkward phrasing or structural errors. Frequent grammatical errors occur, including issues with prepositions ('go community halls', 'available for ballet dance above 11but under the 16'), article usage, and subject-verb agreement. Punctuation errors also appear. To progress, the writer should focus on increasing sentence variety and mastering basic grammatical patterns, reducing error frequency so that sentences are clearer and easier for the reader to follow.
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