Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given graphs illustrate the data about the site and kinds of the dance classes taken by the youth of a town in Australia.The mostly students are attending classes in the private studios of the Australia, but the numbers in the collage based studios are only 10 percent of total students.
To begin with, the sites of the dance classes the strength of the students in the school halls are almost a quater of the whole strenght.
On the other hand, in the presented bar chart the number of students who are under 11 are highest in the ballet classes are more than 600 and are around 300 in the modern classes. And the figuers are almost in the middle of the ballet and the modern classes in tn the tap dance.In contrast the students between the age group of 11 and 16 are more than 500 in modern classes and they are lesser in ballet classes from both modern and tap around 300.
Overall, the mostly students take there classes in private studios and the students under 11 are in ballet quite opposite to the age group 11-16 who are higher in modern clases.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features from both the pie chart and the bar chart, such as the popularity of private studios and the age distribution across dance styles. However, some ideas are under-developed or lack precision. For instance, the mention that students under 11 are highest in ballet classes 'are more than 600' is slightly inaccurate based on the data, and details regarding tap and modern dances are partially vague. An overview is present at the end, capturing the main trends, which satisfies the requirements for this band level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the answer into an introduction, body paragraphs, and an overview. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical and faulty. Transitional phrases like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand' are used, but referencing and logical progression are occasionally disrupted by awkward transitions, such as 'To begin with, the sites of the dance classes the strength of the students in the school halls...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the flow between sentences can be disjointed, affecting readability.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying general concepts such as 'private studios', 'ballet classes', and 'age group'. The writer attempts less common vocabulary, such as 'proportion' or descriptive terms, but encounters some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'collage based studios' instead of 'college-based', and repetitive phrasing like 'dance classes'. There are also minor spelling and word-choice slips that do not impede overall communication, placing the response firmly in this band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
There is a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms attempted throughout the response. However, frequent grammatical errors are present, including articles ('The mostly students'), subject-verb agreement issues ('the numbers in the collage based studios are'), and prepositions ('lesser in ballet classes from both modern'). Punctuation and sentence structures occasionally falter, such as run-on constructions ('And the figuers are almost in the middle... in tn the tap dance.In contrast...'). These errors are noticeable but rarely completely impede communication.
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