Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart and bar chart illustrate three different types of dance classes where young people are currently attending and the location of such classes in Australia.

Overall, it can be seen that majority of classes where conducted in private studios, while college-based studios shared the least amount.Children less than 11 has greatest number of attedance in ballet class comapred to modern which is the lowest, children who are 11 to 16 years old, they mostly attended in modern class, while least in ballet.

Regarding to the pie chart, dance classes which are performed in private studios comprised for almost half of the pie which is 48%, while only 10% in college-based studios. Other locations are showing different porportion of 24% in school halls ( which is often conducted after school) and 18% in community halls and other related locations.

In terms of types of dance classes, 600 children who are under 11 attended in ballet classes, whearas half of number of children chose modern classes, pupils who are ranged between 11 to 16 years old are mostly attended in modern classes which are about 500 children, while only 300 children participated in ballet classes.

Attedance in tap classes in both age groups are estimated around 400 children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting on both the location of dance classes and the types of classes broken down by age group. Key features and comparisons are clearly highlighted, such as the dominance of private studios at 48% and the contrasting preferences between younger and older children in ballet and modern dance. However, while the main trends are covered, some aspects are slightly under-developed or lack full extension, placing the response solidly at the mid-level. The overview adequately captures the most striking general trends, though the mechanics of selection could be slightly sharper to reach a higher level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to group information logically by chart type. Paragraphing is utilised to separate the introduction, the general overview, the pie chart data, and the bar chart data. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or slightly faulty, with awkward transitional phrases such as 'Regarding to the pie chart' and some run-on or awkwardly linked sentences, as seen in the second paragraph where multiple clauses are strung together with commas. Referencing is generally clear, but the logical progression between sentences occasionally stumbles due to these cohesive shortcomings.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully communicating the trends in the charts with terms like 'comprised for', 'proportion', and 'participated'. The writer makes some attempts to use less common vocabulary, but these are occasionally marred by lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'shared the least amount' instead of 'accounted for the smallest proportion', and spelling or word-form slips like 'attedance'. Word choice is sometimes imprecise, but it never completely impedes communication, satisfying the criteria for an adequate but limited lexical range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating that the writer can handle various structures. However, there are noticeable grammatical errors throughout the response, including subject-verb agreement issues ('majority of classes where conducted', 'Children less than 11 has'), incorrect prepositions ('attended in'), and comma splices, particularly in the overview paragraph. While these errors occur regularly, they rarely impede overall communication, reflecting a control level characterised by a mix of correct structures and persistent minor errors.

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