Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Pie Chart:

There is apie chart representing the percentages of locations that the young dancers in a town in australia are currently attending. Here is the brief summary of the data mentioned in pie chart.

The highest percentage that is 48% of dance classes are conducted in private studios.

The 24 % of dance classes are conducted in school halls as an after school activity.

18% of the community halls and other places are reserved for young dancers.

The10% of dance classes are conducted at college based studios.

Bar Chart:

There is also a bar chart or bar graph representing the number of students vs type of dance classes as per age groups.

300 students under 11 years prefer modern dance.

Approximate 520 students from an age group of 11 years to 16 years likes to attend modern dance classes.

approximate450 students of age group under 11 years like to join tap dance and almost 410 students of the age group from 11 to 16 years old like tap dance.

600 students join Ballet dance their age range is under 11 years.

300 students join ballet dance of age group 11 to 16 years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially. While the student attempts to report figures from both the pie chart and the bar chart, the approach is mechanical and lacks an overall summary or overview, which is essential for Academic Task 1. Key features and comparisons are not adequately highlighted; instead, the student lists individual data points in a disjointed manner, such as writing "300 students under 11 years prefer modern dance" and listing details separately without grouping or contrasting information effectively. Furthermore, some data reporting contains inaccuracies, such as reading 520 as "Approximate 520 students" and 410 as "almost 410 students" in a slightly repetitive style. To reach a higher band, the writer must include a clear overview paragraph summarising the main trends and integrate comparisons between the data categories rather than simply cataloguing numbers.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation, dividing the response into a pie chart section and a bar chart section, but there is no clear overall progression or cohesive structure. Paragraphing is fragmented, with the student using isolated, single-sentence paragraphs like "The highest percentage that is 48% of dance classes are conducted in private studios" and "The10% of dance classes are conducted at college based studios." Cohesive devices are largely absent or inadequate, failing to guide the reader smoothly through the information. To improve, the writer needs to employ logical paragraphing, introduce clear topic sentences, and use a variety of cohesive devices such as sequencing words and referencing pronouns to link ideas together rather than relying on a bullet-point-like list of sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, repeatedly relying on basic phrases like "dance classes are conducted" and "students join." There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word formations, such as "college based studios" lacking a hyphen, spacing errors like "The10%", and mechanical phrasing such as "likes to attend" when referring to plural subjects. Less common vocabulary is absent, and word choices remain restricted to the basic terms provided in the prompt. To achieve a higher score, the writer must demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary, use more precise synonyms for describing data trends, and eliminate basic typographical and word-choice errors that restrict the quality of the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and repetitive sentence structures. There are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, including missing articles (e.g., "There is apie chart" with a spacing error, "as an after school activity"), subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., "an age group of 11 years to 16 years likes to attend" where the subject 'group' or the plural ages conflict with 'likes'), and preposition misuse. Punctuation and spacing are also faulty throughout the text. To progress, the student must incorporate a greater variety of complex sentence structures and improve the accuracy of basic grammatical patterns, verb forms, and punctuation.

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