Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the pie chart illustrates the data of teenagers who participating in numerous types of dance classes and on different locations in Australia.

Overall, it is undeniable fact that majority of young people are participated in private studios. Few Students are involved in Collage based studios. There are three different types of dance sessions which is classified in two different age groups.

Firstly, there are four various sites of dance classes in which 18 percent of youngsters are involved in community halls and 24 percent are in School halls after study. Most popular place by participants is private studios and maximum people don't like Collage based studios.

In addition to, maximum number of teenagers participated in Ballet dance classes and and less Youngsters liked these classes. The modern dance classes mostly liked by new generation and few teenagers are interested in modern classes. Moreover, in tap type dance classes there is no major difference between who participated in those classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially. While the student attempts to cover both the pie chart regarding the location of dance classes and the bar chart illustrating the types of dance classes by age group, the information provided is very general and contains inaccurate reporting. For instance, the statement that 'maximum number of teenagers participated in Ballet dance classes and and less Youngsters liked these classes' contradicts the visual data for the older age group where Modern dance is higher, and the phrasing is confusing. Furthermore, the overview lacks a clear synthesis of the main trends across both charts, presenting instead a series of disjointed observations. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to select and report key features accurately, avoiding contradictions, and ensure that all main comparisons between the categories are clearly and correctly highlighted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some organisation in the response, with an introduction, an overview sentence, and body paragraphs attempting to separate the data types. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the linking devices used are somewhat repetitive and mechanical, such as 'Overall', 'Firstly', and 'In addition to'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, often jumping between different points without smooth transitions. For instance, the final paragraph mixes observations about ballet, modern, and tap dance classes without a logical flow. To improve, the writer should focus on creating a clear logical thread connecting the introduction, overview, and detailed body paragraphs, while using a wider and more natural range of cohesive devices to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student relies heavily on basic terminology and makes several noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as writing 'Collage' instead of 'College' and using repetitive phrases like 'dance classes' and 'participated'. While there are some attempts to use less common vocabulary, inaccuracies in collocation and word form—such as 'teenagers who participating' and 'on different locations'—cause some difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range by incorporating precise, task-specific vocabulary and synonyms (e.g., proportion, sector, age bracket) while ensuring correct word formation and spelling throughout.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences and basic complex forms that frequently contain errors. There are noticeable grammatical inaccuracies throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('teenagers who participating', 'classes which is classified'), preposition errors ('on different locations'), and article omissions. These frequent errors can cause some difficulty for the reader. To reach the next level, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of grammatical structures with improved accuracy, paying closer attention to verb tenses, relative clauses, and prepositions within grammatical patterns to ensure that sentences are largely error-free.

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