Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrate three different locations of dance classes and young people's attendance in types of dance classes in a town in Australia. The pie chart demonstrates four areas of dance classes. Among the locations, Private studios occupying most of the space for dances. It's percentage is at 48.

College-based studios had the least area among the trio. Community halls and other had a space of around 18%, followed by the 24% area of school halls.

The bar chart highlights the types of dance classes attended by a diverse range of age groups. Children under 11, had the highest attendance in the ballet classes. 600 adolescents attended that class. The least attendance of under 11 was recorded in modern dance classes, while the moderate amount went in tap classes. The number, it recorded was at 450.

Age groups between 11-16 went more in modern dance classes. The quantity almost surpassed 500. There wasn't a much difference in attendance of ballet and tap. 300 students attended ballet, while, almost 410 appeared in tap.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by presenting information from both the pie chart and the bar chart, and provides some comparisons. However, the treatment of the visual data is uneven, and some parts are under-developed or inaccurately reported. For instance, the reference to '600 adolescents attended that class' when describing children under 11 is slightly contradictory in terminology. Furthermore, the overview of the charts lacks a cohesive summary of the main overarching trends, focusing instead on isolated data points. To move to a higher band, the response needs to extend and support all reported features clearly while avoiding inaccuracies in reading the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the information by dividing the description into paragraphs dedicated to the different charts. However, cohesion at the sentence level is sometimes mechanical or faulty. For instance, transitional phrases between sentences can feel abrupt, such as shifting suddenly between data points without smooth connecting devices (e.g., 'College-based studios had the least area among the trio. Community halls and other had a space...'). Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as ambiguous pronouns or abrupt subject shifts. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to ensure that cohesive devices are used more flexibly and that logical progression between ideas flows more naturally throughout the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic features of the charts. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary and synonyms, such as 'occupying most of the space' and 'diverse range of age groups'. However, there are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice, collocation, and word form. For example, expressions like 'It's percentage is at 48' contain a punctuation error ('It's' instead of 'Its'), and phrases like 'the moderate amount went in tap classes' or 'went more in modern dance classes' are unnatural collocations. Spelling is generally accurate, but lexical control remains at a level where errors prevent more precise expression. To improve, the student should focus on natural phrasing and precise word choices.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt to vary sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that persist throughout the text. Examples include missing articles or preposition errors, such as 'Among the locations, Private studios occupying most of the space' (lacking a finite verb) and 'There wasn't a much difference'. Punctuation is also occasionally problematic, such as unnecessary commas ('while, almost 410 appeared'). While these errors rarely impede overall communication, they occur regularly enough to restrict the response. To reach a higher band, the student must increase the proportion of error-free sentences and ensure better control over verb forms and clause structures.

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