Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts below illustrate information on the location and type of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are attending presently.
Overall, the ballet dance category initially recorded the highest number of youngsters in attendance, this was followed by modern dance category, the two category decreased overtime to the same level, while those at the tap category are at almost par.
The charts indicate that the number of young chidren involved in ballet type of dance made use of the private studio when they recorded the highest number of 600 youngsters and had to make use of the community hall and others when their number fell to 300. consequently those involved in the tap and modern type of dance, made use of the community halls and others when their numbers are 500 and 420 respectively, while the private studios was in use when their numbers was at 450 and 300 respectively and this was regardless of the number.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, standing at 149 words (with 11 words copied from the prompt excluded). Furthermore, the content suffers from serious misinterpretations of the visual data. The student misreads the charts entirely, claiming incorrectly that age groups and dance types relate to location changes over time (e.g., stating that youngsters in ballet 'had to make use of the community hall... when their number fell to 300'). The summary does not accurately report the main features or make valid comparisons from the mixed charts provided, presenting confused and largely inaccurate information.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The essay displays some basic organization with an introductory sentence and paragraph divisions, but information and ideas are not arranged coherently due to confused data interpretation. Progression is difficult to follow because referencing is unclear and links between sentences are faulty. For instance, transitional phrases like 'consequently' are misused to connect unrelated data points. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow breaks down significantly as the writer attempts to synthesize the pie chart and bar chart without a clear structuring strategy.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for communicating basic concepts, but contains noticeable errors and awkward phrasing that impede understanding. Words are occasionally misused or confused, such as writing 'chidren' (spelling error) or attempting less common vocabulary like 'youngsters' and 'category' repetitively. Collocations are frequently weak, and terms from the prompt are recycled without variation. While the vocabulary allows the writer to attempt a discussion of the charts, the imprecise word choice and spelling slips reflect a restricted range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on clumsy complex sentences that are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors in verb tenses, agreements, and prepositions inside grammatical patterns, such as 'when their numbers was at 450' and 'the two category decreased overtime'. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences joined inappropriately by commas rather than full stops or correct conjunctions. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader in parsing the intended meaning.
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