Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given charts illustrate the information about the location and types of dance classes of young persons in a town in Australia in the specific year. The data has been measured in ratio and numbers.
Overall, it can be seen in the pie chart that the maximum youngsters
who preffered private studios for dancing and the minimum young people used college-based studio for dancing.
To commence with, in the pie chart, there was 18% of youngsters organised dance into the community hall whereas 10% of people used college-based studios for dancing. The ratio of individuals who preffered private studios for dancing was 48%. The school hall was used by only 24% of individuals.
Moving further, the ballet dance class is preffered by 600 people under aged 11 whereas 300 people above 11 year old took part in ballet dance. There were 20 people different between under aged 11 and age 11-16, who took part in tap dance were nearly 420 youngsters. There were around half population of people difference between both given aged group humans in modern dance classes. It were 530 people and 300 persons respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by presenting an overview of the charts and reporting the main features, such as the highest percentage for private studios and comparisons across age groups. However, some ideas are under-developed or imprecise. For instance, the description of the bar chart data contains confused calculations and vague comparisons, such as stating 'There were 20 people different' or describing the modern dance difference confusingly as 'around half population of people difference'. While the overall trends are identified, the lack of precision and under-development of specific data points prevent the task achievement from reaching a higher level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the answer into an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for each chart. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical. The transitional phrases used, such as 'To commence with' and 'Moving further', feel somewhat unnatural and template-driven. Additionally, referencing and logical progression within the final paragraph become slightly confusing when attempting to contrast the age groups and data values, making the flow less than completely smooth throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but the range is limited and contains noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and collocation. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but often with inaccuracy, such as 'youngsters who preffered private studios', misspelling 'preffered' and 'aged', and using awkward phrasing like 'young people used college-based studio' instead of studios. There are also inappropriate lexical choices such as 'measured in ratio and numbers' and 'age group humans'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting relative clauses and comparative structures. However, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement and preposition issues, such as 'young persons in a town... in the specific year', 'youngsters organised dance into the community hall', and tense or structural slips like 'It were 530 people and 300 persons respectively'. While these errors rarely completely impede understanding, their persistence across various sentence types keeps the grammatical control at this level.
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