Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustrates th breakdown of location of dance classes, while the accompanying table details the type of multiple dance classes by their age groups attended the a town of Australia currently people attending.
Overall, is is evident that the private studio has the largest percentage of people. Moreover, ballet is mostly famour under age of 11 and modern dance
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response falls well short of the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 61 words. Consequently, it only minimally responds to the task. While the student makes a brief attempt to introduce the charts ('The pie chart illustrates th breakdown...'), the information is presented in a very fragmented manner. Key features of the visual data are only touched upon in a rudimentary fashion, such as noting that private studios have the largest percentage and mentioning ballet for the under-11 age group, but the response trails off mid-sentence ('and modern dance') and fails to complete any meaningful overview or comprehensive comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some basic organization attempted, such as the use of an opening introductory marker 'Overall, is is evident that', but the text lacks an overall progression due to its extreme brevity. Paragraphing is disjointed because the writing cuts off abruptly after just two short sentences. Cohesive devices are largely absent, and referencing is minimal. To achieve a higher score, the student needs to develop fully articulated paragraphs that logically sequence the main features and comparisons of the visual data using a wider range of appropriate cohesive links.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and limited, featuring noticeable spelling and typographical errors such as 'th' for 'the' and 'famour' for 'famous'. Phrases like 'the breakdown of location' and 'type of multiple dance classes' show awkward phrasing and inadequate lexical control. While words like 'percentage', 'studios', and 'ballet' are relevant to the topic, the range is too restricted to satisfy higher criteria. To improve, the student should expand their vocabulary to include precise reporting language and ensure accurate word forms and spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, and the attempt at a complex sentence ('while the accompanying table details...') contains severe structural flaws and agreement issues, such as 'attended the a town of Australia currently people attending'. There are frequent basic errors, including typographical slips like 'is is evident', which cause difficulty for the reader and distort meaning. The lack of completed sentences and persistent structural inaccuracies keep the grammar score at this level.
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