Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrate the location and the other bar chart demonstrate the types of dance classes of young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, the pie chart had a share significantly larger location of a private studios, whereas a college-based studios had smaller ratio. There are number of students who were enrolled, under eleven and eleven to sixteen years old children.

The chart shows four locations of dance classes, such as a private studios accounted for 48%, while school halls represented as 24%, after school time. Community halls and other shared a ratio 18%, and a college based studios made up 10%.

The chart of dance classes by an age group, the ballet dance class students had significantly higher number, such as 600 students under eleven years old, and 300 students between eleven to sixteen. The tap class students were almost 450, whereas 420 students in the age group of 11-16 years childrens and the modern classes young students were 300, and others were approximately, 520.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the task only partially. While the student attempts to report data from both the pie chart and the bar chart, some key features and comparisons are under-developed or inaccurately described. For instance, the overview sentence ("Overall, the pie chart had a share significantly larger location of a private studios...") is confusing and fails to provide a clear summary of the main trends. Furthermore, some data points are misreported or awkwardly framed, such as stating that modern classes had 300 students and others were approximately 520, which misinterprets the age group breakdown. To reach a higher level, the response needs a clearer, more precise overview and a more thorough, well-supported selection of key comparisons across both charts without relying on vague expressions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation evident in the division of paragraphs, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are frequently inaccurate, mechanical, or awkwardly applied, such as starting paragraphs with abrupt transitions like "The chart shows four locations..." and "The chart of dance classes by an age group...". Referencing is also faulty at times, leading to a disjointed flow of information. The paragraphing separates the introduction, body details, and charts logically, but the internal connections between sentences need significant strengthening. To improve, the writer should use a wider variety of accurate cohesive markers and ensure that ideas flow smoothly from one sentence to the next with logical relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The lexical range used is limited but minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as "accounted for" and "represented", but encounters noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form, including phrases like "larger location of a private studios", "shared a ratio 18%", and "college based studios made up 10%". There are also awkward phrasings like "childrens" (a plural form error) and repetitive sentence frames for reporting data. These lexical inaccuracies and awkward collocations cause some difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, ensure correct word forms and collocations, and demonstrate more precision when describing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic subject-verb patterns. Attempts at more complex structures are frequently faulty, leading to frequent grammatical errors. Examples include tense and agreement issues in the opening sentence ("The pie chart illustrate... and the other bar chart demonstrate..."), missing articles ("a private studios", "a college-based studios"), and incorrect prepositions or noun phrases ("shared a ratio 18%"). Punctuation and sentence construction errors are common throughout the text and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To progress, the student needs to incorporate a wider variety of complex sentence forms while maintaining tighter control over basic grammar, article usage, and subject-verb agreement.

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