Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts below describes information of young people in Australia are attending classes in different locations and variety of dance classes ballet, tap and modern.

Overall, private studios are most visitable places following school halls. College-based studios have least classes of dance.

Number of students attending ballet dance under than eleven are greater than other type and modern dance are almost less than others. There are many students of aged eleven to sixteen are attending modern dance class while, less students are involved in ballet dance.

Admittedly, 48% students visit private studios followed by school halls(after-school) are 24%. College-based studios incurr only 10% dance classes while, community halls and others involve only 18% dance classes. Ballet dance is taken by 600 students under 11 followed by tap dance (450 students).

Resultantly, 520 students are taking part in modern dance under age eleven to sixteen, while 300 students attending ballet dance of this age group. Tap dance is almost nearly taken by both age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all parts of the task by addressing both the location of dance classes and the types of dance across different age groups, satisfying the requirements for a solid score. The writer selects and reports key features, such as identifying private studios as the most popular location at 48% and noting the prominence of modern dance among the 11-16 age group. However, some ideas are under-developed or lack full clarity, which keeps the score at its current level. For instance, the overview sentence is somewhat confusingly phrased ('The charts below describes information...'), and certain comparisons between age groups and dance styles, such as tap dance, are left vague ('Tap dance is almost nearly taken by both age group'). To reach a higher band, the overview should provide a clearer, more polished summary of the main trends without getting bogged down in minor details, and all reported data points must be supported by fully extended explanations.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates some organisation, with the text broken into paragraph blocks that attempt to separate different visual data sets. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the logical flow between sentences often feels disjointed. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the transition 'Admittedly,' which does not fit the context of reporting statistical data, or 'Resultantly,' which sounds unnatural. Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points correspond to which categories. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak due to mechanical linking words and repetitive structures. To improve in this area, the writer needs to ensure a smoother logical progression of ideas, use a wider and more natural range of cohesive devices without overusing or misapplying them, and structure each paragraph around a clear, central theme.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to communicate the basic meaning of the charts. The writer attempts some less-common vocabulary, such as 'visitable', 'incurr', and 'prominence', but these attempts result in noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word form (e.g., 'visitable places' instead of 'visited locations', or 'incurr only 10% dance classes'). There are also awkward phrasings like 'dance classes ballet, tap and modern'. While the reader can generally understand the intended meaning, these vocabulary inaccuracies cause some difficulty. To achieve a higher band, the writer should focus on using precise and natural vocabulary suited to academic data reporting, avoiding invented or misused lexical forms, and ensuring correct collocations when describing statistical proportions and trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response employs a limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are recurrent errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The charts... describes'), missing prepositions or articles ('young people in Australia are attending', 'under age eleven to sixteen'), and awkward modifier placements ('under than eleven'). These frequent errors can cause occasional difficulty for the reader, though they rarely obscure the core meaning completely. A mix of simple and basic complex forms is present, but control over them is inconsistent. To improve, the writer must focus on eliminating basic grammatical slips, ensuring correct verb forms and prepositions, and building a more reliable control over complex sentence patterns with accurate subordination and punctuation.

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