Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The provided charts illustrate the detailts about, what types of dance has persued by yougsters while, other chats depicts the locatios of the institutions in the town of Autralia .
overall, it is vivid that the dominant proportion of schols .Which teaches danceare mostly private .while , the lowest
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly after just 49 words. Consequently, the task is addressed only minimally. The student attempts to introduce the charts and mentions a couple of general elements, such as private dance schools and the location of institutions, but fails to provide a full summary, report the main features, or make the necessary comparisons between the two charts. To reach a higher band, the writer must complete the full report with sufficient length and detail to cover all parts of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The response is extremely brief, consisting of a couple of incomplete sentences and an uncompleted paragraph, which makes overall organization difficult to evaluate. There is an attempt at an introductory overview using 'Overall, it is vivid that...', but the abrupt cutoff prevents any logical progression or development of ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, and paragraphing is incomplete. To improve, the writer needs to structure the response into a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs with logical transitions connecting the data points.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and contains several noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'detailts' for details, 'persued' for pursued, 'yougsters' for youngsters, 'chats' for charts, 'locatios' for locations, 'Autralia' for Australia, and 'schols' for schools. These errors reflect a limited control of word forms and spelling, though the basic meaning of the topic is still discernible. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their lexical range with accurate spelling and appropriate academic vocabulary related to data reporting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text contains a very limited range of structures due to its extreme brevity, and the sentences are incomplete or heavily flawed by poor punctuation and awkward phrasing, such as the fragment 'Which teaches danceare mostly private .while , the lowest'. Punctuation is faulty, with misplaced commas and periods disrupting sentence boundaries. To move up to a higher band, the writer needs to demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms with proper grammatical control, accurate agreement, and correct punctuation.
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