Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pai chart and horizontal bar graph revels information about the areas and verity of dance classes in younger individuals in a nonurban areas of australia are attrending in present time.
Overall, pai charts shows that privet studios taking almost half of the locations for the dance class and one third of the areas are coverd by school halls for the dance classes.Also, community halls and others or college based studios contribute to cover location littlebit.Furthermore, verios types of dance classes attend by the several age group peoples.
Starting with privete studios wich is cover 48% of the location then other studios and the lowest percentages is taken by college based studios which is 10%.Moreover, after the school school halls are being used for the dance location which is around 24% and the community halls and other covers 18%.
According to bar graph highest number of students are noted in a ballet type of dance class who has having under age of 11 year which is 600 students and least number of learners under age 11 noted in modern dance class the ratio of student is around 300 students. Furthermore,in a tap performance academy students are noted between 400 to 500 by both age groups.In addition, over the 11 to 16 year students are having higher intrest in modern dance and the lowest is marked in ballte dance class.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting on both the locations of dance classes and the types of classes across age groups. An overview is provided, highlighting the main features such as private studios being the most common location. Key comparisons are made, noting that ballet is most popular for under-11s while modern dance leads for the 11-16 age group. However, some aspects are slightly under-developed, and certain figures contain minor inaccuracies compared to the visual data, such as misinterpreting the proportion of school halls as 'one third' instead of around a quarter. It fully meets the criteria for a solid score and shows elements of higher task fulfillment by attempting a comprehensive overview and covering both charts.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the information into an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for each chart. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty due to repetitive transitional phrases like 'Furthermore' and 'In addition'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as ambiguous pronoun use when describing data points. While the logical progression is evident, these minor cohesion issues prevent the text from achieving a fully smooth flow throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'nonurban', 'proportion', and 'academy'. However, there are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'pai' instead of 'pie', 'revels' for 'reveals', 'verity' for 'variety', 'attrending', 'privet' or 'privete' for 'private', 'coverd' for 'covered', 'littlebit', 'verios', 'wich', 'ballte', and 'intrest'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score because control over word spelling and collocations remains limited and inconsistent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt at varied structures such as relative clauses ('studios wich is cover 48%') and participial phrases. However, there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation, including subject-verb agreement issues ('classes attend by', 'students are having'), incorrect article use ('a ballet type', 'the bar graph'), and awkward prepositional patterns ('noted in a ballet type'). Although these errors rarely impede overall communication, they are frequent enough to place the response at this level, showing some control of basic forms while struggling with grammatical accuracy in more complex constructions.
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