Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph illustrate theinformaion related to dance classes of young ones in the town of australia.The type of dancespractice are Ballet,Tap and Modern.

Particularly there are four types of studios performing dance classes.The private studios with highest number of performer about 48% and then college based studios with least 10% of student and remaning two are community hall and school hall with 18% and 24% of students.

Furthermore,the student are divided according to age group under 11 and between 11 to 16 year of age.firstly, if talk about Ballet type of dances the number of performer under the age of 11 is high as compare to other student.The number of student below 11 is around 600 while other group share only half of it 300.While the grapg totally shift in the case of Modern dance type.Here the number of performer of age group 11 to 16 is around 520 while the younger performer below the 11 year of age share only 300 of there number.But in the case of Tap the numberof student remain moderate and the younger student are around 460 while the senior student are approx 420 in number.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and report several relevant figures accurately: private studios are identified as the largest location share at 48%, college-based studios as the smallest at 10%, and the age-group figures for ballet, modern and tap are broadly correct. The comparisons between the age groups are useful, especially the contrast between ballet and modern. However, there is no clear overall summary of the main patterns; the response moves directly into details. Some descriptions are also imprecise, such as calling the tap figures “moderate” without explaining that they are close, and referring to the location categories as “types of studios.” A concise overview highlighting the leading venue and the contrasting age preferences would make the key features clearer and more fully address the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a generally understandable sequence: it introduces the charts, describes the locations, and then compares dance styles by age group. Connectors such as “Furthermore,” “firstly,” and “But” help signal movement between points. However, the organisation is not fully controlled: the opening and location information are compressed together, and the age-group comparisons form one long block rather than clearly separated points. Some linking is mechanical, and phrases such as “the graph totally shift” do not clearly express the relationship between the figures. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and details, and organise the dance comparisons consistently—for example, by style or by age group—to make progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main information, including “private studios,” “age group,” “Ballet,” “Modern,” and “Tap.” There are also attempts at comparison, such as “highest” and “least.” However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, including “performer” for students, “the graph totally shift,” and “share only half of it.” Spelling and word-form errors—such as “informaion,” “grapg,” and “numberof”—also reduce precision. Aim for standard chart language and accurate collocations, such as “accounted for,” “the number of students,” and “was twice as high.” This would make the report clearer and more appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can usually understand the comparisons. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction. For example, “The graph illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “the student are divided” has an incorrect plural form. The sentence beginning “Particularly there are four types…” is also awkwardly constructed, and several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation. These problems sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building accurate sentences around a clear subject and verb, then add comparisons with controlled clauses, such as “Among students under 11, ballet was the most popular style.”

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