Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The two charts illustrates the proportion of location in dance classes and types of dance lessons attended by younger peoples in Australia by their age groups. At a glance it is observed that private studios have more larger room for lessons,whereas ballet dance seems to be more relavant for teenagers.

Overall, it is recognized that college-based studios have not more than one tenth of space acquired and ballet dances are less liked by teenagers.

To begin with, private studios are accounted for almost obtaining half of the spaces of dance class at 48%, while school halls stands at almost quarter of the space at 24%. It is also observed that community halls and others has contained 18% of the space where rest is conserved by college-based studios with 10%.

Turning to the remaining categories of another chart ,that shows types of attendees with their age groups. It is determined that thousand plus teenagers are more likely to attend ballet and tap dance, whereas under age of 11 students likes to attend more modern and tap dance, which makes them less attracted towards ballet dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report the location percentages accurately and identify private studios as the largest category, which gives the response some relevant coverage. However, the overview is unclear and includes a misreading: “ballet dance seems to be more relevant for teenagers” and “ballet dances are less liked by teenagers” contradict the chart, where teenagers have fewer ballet students than under-11s. The final paragraph also misreports the age-group comparisons: teenagers are not more likely to attend both ballet and tap overall, and under-11s favour ballet, not modern. The key pattern is that under-11s lead in ballet, while 11–16-year-olds lead in modern; tap figures are similar. Select and compare these main features accurately, and support the overview with the chart’s approximate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and dance-type charts. Phrases such as “To begin with” and “Turning to” help signal the shift between topics. However, progression is weakened because the overview repeats the location point and gives a confusing, inaccurate summary of the age data. The final paragraph combines several comparisons in one long sentence, making the relationships between age groups and dance styles difficult to follow. Use a clearer sequence: summarise the main patterns first, then compare each dance type across the two age groups. Check that linking phrases connect ideas accurately rather than simply marking a new paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “private studios,” “school halls,” and “college-based studios,” and you attempt a range of expressions such as “accounted for” and “Turning to.” However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “more larger room,” “space acquired,” “space is conserved,” and “thousand plus teenagers.” These choices sometimes obscure what the figures represent: the first chart shows the proportions of class locations, while the second gives student numbers. Use precise chart language and familiar collocations rather than forcing less natural phrases. For example, describe a venue as “accounting for 48% of classes” and report “over 1,000 students” only if that total is supported by the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “another chart, that shows types of attendees” and a contrast introduced by “whereas.” However, errors are frequent and sometimes make the comparisons hard to interpret. Examples include subject–verb agreement in “The two charts illustrates” and “school halls stands,” incorrect plural forms in “younger peoples,” and faulty constructions such as “community halls and others has contained.” The sentence beginning “It is determined that” also lacks a clear grammatical structure for comparing the groups. Aim for accurate, direct patterns such as “The charts illustrate…” and “The number of under-11s attending ballet was twice that of 11–16-year-olds.” Review agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, and proofread punctuation around commas.

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