Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of various regions where adults perform dance activities, while bar chart compares the types of dance indivduals attending now a days in Austrailia.

Overall, private studios cover the highest portion twice much as to the other geographical regions based upon the dance classes individuals attending currently. Whereas, Ballet dance type is currently most favoured dance type under teenage students, while Modern dance type is loved almost by middle age students.

The Private studios shows the highest percentage of 48% dance practices, whereas, community halls and school halls cover 18% and 24% respectivelly. The college-based studios presents the lowest proportion of 10% with respect to the other dance based zones in Austrailia.

Under 11 years old students prefers the Ballet dance with the highest figures of around 600, which is seen as declined over the Tap and Modern type significantly. Whereas, Middle age students between 11-16 years old adoring Modern type of dance the most with the considerable amount of around 500 students, which is decline sharply over Tap and Ballet types.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and include relevant figures, such as 48% for private studios and about 600 under-11 ballet students. The overview also identifies private studios as the largest location category and distinguishes the leading dance styles by age group. However, some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear: private studios are not “twice much as” the other regions, and the 11–16 group is not middle-aged. The claim that ballet is most favoured “under teenage students” is also imprecise, since ballet leads only among under-11s; modern leads among 11–16-year-olds. Report the bar-chart comparisons more precisely, including that tap is close between the groups, and avoid unsupported descriptions of preference or decline.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and dance-type data. This helps the reader identify which chart each paragraph discusses. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. In the overview, “Whereas” begins a fragment rather than a complete contrast, and the repeated “whereas” constructions in the detail paragraphs make the relationships feel mechanical. The final paragraph also compares each age group with its own dance categories but does not clearly connect the two groups. Use complete sentences, group related comparisons together, and make references such as “the other geographical regions” more specific.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “highest percentage,” and “lowest proportion,” and you attempt to vary your wording. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and sometimes obscure the data: “geographical regions” refers to locations, not regions, while “dance practices” and “dance based zones” are not suitable descriptions of the chart categories. Phrases such as “adore Modern type” and “loved almost by middle age students” are also too informal or unclear for an academic report. Spelling errors, including “indivduals,” “Austrailia,” and “respectivelly,” further reduce control. Prefer precise chart language such as “venues,” “accounted for,” and “the most popular style.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt complex sentences and use contrast clauses, but control is inconsistent, which sometimes makes the comparisons hard to interpret. For example, “while bar chart compares” is missing an article, and “The Private studios shows” has a subject–verb agreement error. The phrase “Under 11 years old students prefers” also has incorrect agreement, while “which is seen as declined” and “which is decline sharply” use faulty verb forms. Some sentences are joined awkwardly, as in the overview’s “Whereas” clause. Practise accurate present-tense reporting, subject–verb agreement, articles, and complete clause structures. Simpler, well-controlled sentences would make the figures clearer while you build confidence with complex forms.

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