Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart provide a comparative breakdown of the proportions of types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending across different across 11 - 16 years old categories in private studios, community halls and other, school halls ( after school ) and college based studios.

Overall, it is conspicuous that private studios accounted for the lion share of the total distribution in both period. Conversely, college based studios represented the least significant component throughout, further more, while the market share for school halls underwent a noticeable expansion the opposite trend was observed in community halls and other.

In terms of primary sector private studios emerged as most dominated feature constitution precisely fraction of the overall 48% in total. This was closely followed by college based studios which accounted for a substantial 10%, outstripping schools halls by margin of 14% by contrast, The figure for community halls and other however, a modest 18 during the same time frame.

Shifting focus to remain component a completely contrasting scenario was evident the combine share of ballet dance and modern dance made up a mere fraction of the whole sitting at 300 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies the largest location category as private studios (48%) and the smallest as college-based studios (10%), and it attempts an overview. However, the overview is partly inaccurate: the chart gives one set of location proportions, not figures “in both period,” and it does not show changes over time. The claim that school halls expanded while community halls declined is therefore unsupported. The comparison in the next paragraph also reverses the figures: school halls are 24%, which is 14 percentage points higher than college-based studios, not lower. Most importantly, the second chart’s age-group dance figures are not reported accurately; “300 students” is only the under-11 modern figure, not the combined share of ballet and modern. The task is addressed only partially, with key information misread or omitted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and detail paragraphs, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Shifting focus” signal movement between points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the response moves from location percentages to age-group data without clearly explaining the relationship between the charts. Several linking expressions do not accurately connect the ideas: “Conversely” and “further more” introduce claims about trends that the chart does not show. The final paragraph is especially unclear, as “remain component” and “the combine share” do not identify which figures are being compared. Clearer paragraph focus, accurate referencing, and simpler links between the two charts would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

The response shows a broad vocabulary range and attempts less common expressions, including “comparative breakdown,” “conspicuous,” “lion share,” “substantial,” and “contrasting scenario.” This range is a strength, but control of collocation and precision is uneven: “most dominated feature constitution” and “a mere fraction of the whole sitting at 300 students” are difficult to interpret, while “lion share” is less suitable for formal chart reporting than “largest proportion.” Some phrases also imply unsupported change, such as “noticeable expansion.” To strengthen this performance, favour accurate, natural terms for proportions and comparisons, and use sophisticated vocabulary only when its meaning and grammatical fit are clear. Check spelling and word forms, including “furthermore” and “combined.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts complex sentences, including “while the market share for school halls underwent a noticeable expansion the opposite trend was observed…” and “This was closely followed by…”. However, many sentences contain errors in agreement, articles, number, or punctuation that make the meaning hard to follow. For example, “The pie chart provide” needs subject–verb agreement, and “private studios accounted for the lion share… in both period” has problems with the article and plural form. The long overview sentence also needs clearer punctuation to separate its clauses. Sentence structures are attempted, but complex constructions are often not controlled reliably. Build accuracy first with shorter, complete sentences, then combine ideas using correctly punctuated clauses.

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