Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the percentage of the location of dance classes while the bar chart compares the types of dance classes( by age group).

Overall, the pie chart reveals that the locatioon is futher devided in Community halls and others, Private studios, school halls( after-school) and college-based studios. Private studios are at the peak whereas the least percentage is occupied by college-based studios. Moreover, there are three types of dance classes named as Ballet, Tap and Modern which are devided into two age groups such as under 11 and 11-16. Ballet are at the top in both age groups.

Firstly, the private studio covers 48% portion while school halls and commutiny halls & others have a different of 6%. College-based studios have only 10% location.

Secondly, the bar graph demostrate the number of students in three types of classes which are further devided into two groups. The students aged under 11 are at the top while other group has half in numbers. The ballet and modern have 300 students of both age groups and tap has almost 400 students of both groups.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify both charts and provide an overview, noting that private studios account for the largest share and college-based studios the smallest. However, several key comparisons are inaccurate or unclear, which limits how fully the data are reported. “Ballet are at the top in both age groups” is incorrect: ballet is highest for under-11s, but modern is highest among 11–16-year-olds. The claim that the under-11 group is “at the top” and the other group has “half in numbers” also misrepresents the bars; totals are broadly similar, and the older group has more students in modern. The figures for ballet and modern are not both 300 in each group. Include accurate comparisons across the age groups and report the chart’s main patterns more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs beginning “Firstly” and “Secondly.” This makes the two charts easy to distinguish and gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes weakened by unclear references and repetitive listing. For example, “the other group” does not clearly identify which age group, while “Ballet are at the top” is not sufficiently precise about the comparison. The final paragraph moves between age-group totals and individual dance types without a clear sequence. Organise the bar-chart details by comparing each dance across the two age groups, and use explicit labels such as “students aged 11–16” to make relationships clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “students,” and “covers,” so the topic is generally understandable. There is also some attempt to vary wording with phrases such as “at the peak” and “demonstrate.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing data: “the location is further divided” describes categories rather than locations, and “have a different of 6%” does not clearly express the comparison. Spelling errors such as “locatioon,” “futher,” “commutiny,” and “demostrate” are noticeable, while “at the top” is vague when describing the highest figure. Use precise chart language such as “account for,” “share,” “highest proportion,” and “number of students,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and some longer structures, including “while” comparisons and clauses introduced by “which,” showing an attempt at varied sentence forms. The main meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “Ballet are” has subject–verb disagreement, and “the students aged under 11 are at the top” uses an unclear construction for describing figures. In “the bar graph demonstrate,” the singular subject requires “demonstrates”; “the private studio covers 48% portion” also needs an article or a different structure. Punctuation spacing and brackets are inconsistent. Aim for accurate subject–verb agreement and use clear comparative sentence patterns, such as “Under-11s number 600 in ballet, compared with 300 among older students.”

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