Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts illustrates information on young people presently going to the dance classes location and types of classes in Australia, categories by age group.

Overall, there are four most common location for young people for dance classes. In which private studios is taking the highest lead comparing to others. Three types of dances are learned by students is Ballet, Tap and Modern.

Almost half of the location of dance classes are of private studios, while other locations, shares the other half portion. College-based studios holds 10% of the portion. 18% of locations is of Community halls and other. One quarter of location is of School halls that is used for the purpose of dance classes after school.

For age under 11, the most famous dance classes are ballet dance as 600 of students learn it, while the least famous is modern dance with just half of ballet students learn it. Tap dance remain in between as more than 400 students are there. For the age group of 11 to 16 opposite of other age group modern dance is more famous as more than 500 students are taking the classes. Tap dance similarly remains in between both dance with above 400 students and ballet dance being least favourite among 11-16 age at just 300 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and identify several important comparisons. The overview notes that private studios lead, and your age-group paragraphs correctly show the contrast: ballet is highest for under-11s, while modern is highest for 11–16-year-olds; you also report the relevant approximate figures. However, the overview is not fully developed: it lists the three dance styles without summarising the main age-group contrast. Some location descriptions are imprecise, such as “four most common location” and “other locations, shares the other half portion”; the chart gives four categories, but they are not all equally common. Make the overview more selective and precise, and compare the two age groups directly to make the key features clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on locations and a paragraph comparing dance styles by age. This makes the information easy to follow, and phrases such as “while” and “For the age group of 11 to 16” help signal contrasts. Cohesion is less successful in places because some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, “In which private studios…” is a sentence fragment, and “Tap dance similarly remains in between both dance” does not clearly explain the comparison. Improve progression by making the overview a concise summary of the main patterns, then use clear comparison sentences within each data paragraph. Check that pronouns and linking phrases refer unambiguously to the chart categories.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to describe the charts, including “private studios,” “College-based studios,” “age group,” and “least favourite.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision. “Taking the highest lead” is not a natural way to describe the largest share, and “most famous dance classes” suggests popularity or celebrity rather than the number of students. “Other locations, shares the other half portion” is also awkward and vague. Aim for standard data-reporting language such as “account for,” “the largest proportion,” and “the most popular style” or “the style with the highest enrolment.” This will make comparisons more concise and appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “as,” and the main meaning is generally understandable. However, errors in agreement, sentence construction and articles occur across the response. For example, “The charts illustrates” should use a plural verb, while “Three types of dances are learned by students is…” combines incompatible structures. In “College-based studios holds 10%,” the subject and verb do not agree, and “18% of locations is” also needs a plural construction. Some sentences are fragments, including “In which private studios is taking the highest lead…” Practise building complete sentences around a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and article use before submitting.

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