Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Both charts below illustrate statistics about the places and types of dance classes which young individuals are being attending in a town of Australia.

Overall, it is evident that the place, namely, Private Studios holds the first rank in the chart whereas College based Studios accounted lowest proportion of dance classes. Furthermore, under eleven age group showed maximum interest in Ballet Dance classes whereas students between eleven to sixteen age group represented most interest in Modern Dance classes.

On the one hand, the Private Studios accounted 48% share as a popular place for dance classes. Following this, School Halls stood at second rank with 24% proportion. Ultimately, Community Halls and the College based Studios represteed lowest shares with 18% and 10% proportion.

Turning to the remaining chart, 600 number of students under 11 age group showed interest in the Ballet Dance classes as compared to other age group. Furthermore, Tap Dance classes accounted 450 number of students with minor diffference in both age groups. Sebsequently, 11 to 16 age group showed highest interest with 520 number of students in contrast to under 11 age group students.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion6.5
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, while college-based studios are smallest at 10%. You also compare the age groups, correctly noting the under-11 peak in ballet and the older group’s peak in modern. This gives the response a clear overview and relevant supporting figures. However, the overview says the older group showed the most interest in modern without explicitly comparing its 520 students with the younger group’s 300, and the final paragraph does not report the under-11 modern figure or the older group’s ballet figure. The tap comparison is also described as a “minor difference” without stating the values. More precise comparisons across all three dance styles would make the coverage more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and age-group charts. Phrases such as “On the one hand” and “Turning to the remaining chart” help signal the shift between topics, and the information generally progresses logically. However, some linking expressions feel mechanical or do not accurately express the relationship between points. “Ultimately” is awkward before the remaining location figures, while “Subsequently” suggests a sequence that is not present in the chart. The final sentence also leaves the comparison implicit. Use simpler, more precise transitions and connect each figure directly to the relevant comparison; this would make cohesion more flexible and the progression clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted,” “interest,” and “age group,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “holds the first rank” and “represented most interest,” but these are not natural collocations for describing chart data. “Accounted 48% share” also needs a more suitable construction, and “dance classes” is repeated frequently. Spelling slips such as “represteed,” “difffrence,” and “Sebsequently” reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “was the most popular,” and “the figure stood at,” while checking spelling and avoiding unnecessarily elaborate expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the information remains understandable. The opening sentence, for example, uses a relative clause, while the overview combines two comparisons. However, some grammatical errors recur. “Young individuals are being attending” has an incorrect verb form; “Private Studios holds” has subject–verb disagreement; and “the Private Studios accounted 48% share” is missing the required preposition and article. In “600 number of students … showed interest,” the noun phrase is not formed correctly. These errors do not usually prevent understanding, but they limit control. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and standard patterns such as “the figure for … was” and “accounted for … of the total.”

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