Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart provide information about the location of dance classes that are young people in a town in Australia are attending and the bar graph illustrates the category of dance classes with their age groups and number of students.

Overall,it is clear that about half of the total young participants in dance classes are attending the classes at private studios.According to age group and dance class types, most attendants under the age of 11 are visiting Ballet classes,while other elder then them are attending modern dance classes.

At first, most of the students are going to private studios accounted for 48% of the total students that is almost equal if we combine all other location students together.School halls are the second most popular location among students with 24% who are attending their dance classes after school time.There are 18% students who are going to community halls and other for their classes.College-based studios have the least proportion of the total students with 10% of the whole.

In general, students under the age of 11 are mostly going to Ballet classes with 600 students. However, the second most people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify both charts and report the main location figures accurately, including private studios at 48% and college-based studios as the least common option at 10%. Your overview also notes the leading dance style for each age group, which is a relevant comparison. However, the account of the bar chart is incomplete: the response stops after “the second most people,” so it does not report the remaining comparisons or give a complete summary of the age-group data. In addition, the claim that older students mainly attend modern classes is broadly supported, but it would be stronger with the approximate figure and a comparison with tap and ballet. Cover the full set of key features and complete the final comparison.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and age-group charts. This helps the reader follow the topic, and transitions such as “Overall” and “However” signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is weakened by repetition of the location information between the overview and the next paragraph, while the final paragraph ends abruptly at “the second most people,” leaving the comparison unfinished. Some linking is also mechanical, particularly “At first” for introducing chart details. Organise the body around the most important comparisons, use transitions that accurately show the relationship between points, and ensure each paragraph develops a complete idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “private studios,” “community halls,” “proportion,” and “age group,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal reporting language, such as “illustrates” and “accounted for.” However, some choices are unnatural or imprecise: “category of dance classes” would be better expressed as “types of dance classes,” and “elder then them” is not an appropriate way to compare the age groups. “Attendants” is also less suitable than “students” or “participants” in this context. Aim for natural collocations and precise terms, especially when describing people and chart categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a relative clause in “students that is almost equal” and a contrast introduced by “while.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction reduce accuracy. For example, “The pie chart provide” needs a singular verb, and “the location … that are young people … are attending” has an unclear, faulty structure. The sentence beginning “School halls are the second most popular location … with 24% who are attending” also has an awkward clause connection. Check subject–verb agreement and build comparisons in complete, clearly linked clauses; careful punctuation after introductory phrases would also improve readability.

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