Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates information about the location and the categories of the classes that are attending by young people currently living in a town of Australia.

Overall, the chart is giving information about the four main locations of the dance classes. All the four locations are divided into parts just to show the exact percentage of the students who attend those classes.

Moreover, the majority number of the students are attending classes at private studios which are 48%. The second biggest percentage of the students are attending the school halls (after-school) which are 24%. On the other hand, there are two more categories named as (community halls & others) and (college-based studios) which are 18% and 10% respectively.

Furthermore, there is also a chart below which illustrates information about the types of dance classes according to the age groups. The majority number of the students are of age under 11 in the ballet classes. While in opposite to that the least number of students are of age under 11 also but in the modern classes. The remaining cateogries of the students are just moderate in all types of classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the four location shares accurately and identify private studios as the largest category, with college-based studios the smallest. You also introduce the age-group chart and correctly note that under-11s are most numerous in ballet and least numerous in modern. However, the second chart is only partly described: the response omits the key comparisons for ages 11–16, including their high figure in modern and their lower ballet figure, and does not give any approximate numbers. The statement that the remaining categories are “just moderate” is vague and does not explain the differences between tap and modern. To strengthen the summary, select the main contrasts across both age groups and support them with figures, while keeping the overview focused on the most notable patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a generally understandable sequence: it introduces the charts, discusses locations, and then moves to dance types. Paragraphing and signposts such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” help the reader follow this structure. However, some linking is mechanical, and the overview repeats that the chart gives information rather than summarising the main patterns. The transition “While in opposite to that” is awkward, and the final sentence does not clearly connect “moderate” numbers to particular age groups or dance styles. Organise the body around the two charts and use clearer comparisons, such as contrasting the age groups within each dance type. This would make progression more purposeful and references easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “percentage,” and “age groups,” so the main information is generally clear. However, the range is limited by repeated, imprecise phrases such as “the majority number of the students” and “the chart is giving information.” Some collocations and forms are inaccurate or awkward, including “categories named as” and “cateogries”; these reduce the naturalness of the report. “Moderate” is also too vague to describe the remaining figures accurately. Aim for concise data-reporting language and precise terms for proportions and comparisons. For example, describe a category as “accounting for” a share, or say that one group “outnumbered” another, rather than repeatedly referring to the “number of students.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and attempts at more complex structures, such as “While in opposite to that…” and the clause beginning “which are 18% and 10% respectively.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but some sentence structures are awkward or incomplete. “While in opposite to that the least number…” is a dependent clause without a well-formed main clause, and “the chart is giving information” uses an unsuitable progressive form for describing a static chart. There are also agreement and article problems in phrases such as “the majority number … are” and “the four main locations.” Use straightforward present-tense reporting structures, check subject–verb agreement, and make sure contrast clauses form complete sentences. Greater control of these patterns would improve accuracy.

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