Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

so basically there are 3 types dance the one is ballets its is the dance student dancer the number of ballet dancers are age 11 to 16 is below 300 and the under 11 is surpirsing me which is about above 600 and other is tap dancers therir under 11 age dancer is near about 450 and therir 11 to 16 age is less than 450 and the 3rd one type is modern dancer students their numbrer is about 500 plus of age 11 to 16 and near about 300 students under 11 now i tell you where all these students takes dance classes the data shows that about 48% in the private studio this is the highest other than another l;ocation is community hall and other is about 18% and those who are taking classes in school hall after thee school is about 24% and the rest 10% take class in the college based studios

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify both chart topics and report several relevant figures, including private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, and the age-group figures for ballet and modern dance. However, the response mainly lists data rather than summarising the most important features. It gives no clear overview of the main contrasts—for example, private studios are the most common location, while college-based studios are least common; ballet is more popular among under-11s, whereas modern dance leads among 11–16-year-olds. Some comparisons are also inaccurate or imprecise: 11–16 tap is about 420, not less than 450 in a meaningful contrast with the younger group’s 450. Add a concise overview and report comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly understandable order: it describes the three dance types first, then moves to class locations. Basic linking phrases such as “and,” “other,” and “now” help signal some progression. However, the whole answer is presented as one long sentence-like sequence, with no paragraphing or clear overview, so the reader has to work to separate the chart’s main points. Repeated wording such as “the number,” “students,” and “about” also makes the progression feel list-like. Use separate paragraphs for the two charts, and organise each around a main comparison before adding supporting figures. More precise links such as “by contrast” and “whereas” would clarify relationships.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough chart-related vocabulary to communicate the basic subject, including “private studio,” “community hall,” “percentage,” and age-group labels. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “the 3rd one type,” “the data shows,” and repeated uses of “about” and “students.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, including “surpirsing,” “therir,” and “numbrer,” which can slow the reader. Aim for accurate, concise reporting language: for example, describe figures as “approximately” or “around,” and use “the most popular dance style” or “the largest share” where appropriate. Check spelling and avoid conversational fillers.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates the general topic, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Most information is joined into a single extended sequence, and attempts to connect clauses often produce faulty structures, as in “the one is ballets its is the dance student dancer.” There are recurring problems with articles, plurals, agreement, and sentence boundaries; for example, “the rest 10% take class” needs a clearer subject and article, while “where all these students takes dance classes” has subject–verb disagreement. The range is also narrow, relying mainly on simple clauses joined with “and.” Build shorter, complete sentences and practise accurate comparisons using structures such as “whereas” and “compared with,” with careful punctuation.

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