Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart illustrates the location of dance classes, while accompanying bar graph depicts different types of classes which are currently attended by children in Australia, of age below eleven and from eleven to sixteen.

At first glance, it is clear that the private studios are the highest, which is 48%. The proportion of school halls is half to that of private studios. The percentages of college based studios and community halls and others are 10 and 18 respectively.

Moving further, ballet classes are more popular among students who are under 18 and its strength is 600 higher than any other classes and it is 2 times higher if compared to group of children aged 11 to 16. The children between the given two age groups show a negligible difference for tap classes. Lastly, the modern classes students who are under 11 accounts for 300, whereas the students who are between 11 to 16 notice just a little more than 500.

Overall, private studios occupy more space, whereas only a small amount of space is covered by college-based studios. The group of children who are under 11 are the highest in ballet classes. In contrast, the children of age group of 11-16 attended more modern classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify several important comparisons, including private studios as the largest location category and the contrast between age groups in modern classes. The figures for the location chart are reported accurately, and the bar-chart values are broadly represented. However, some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate: “ballet classes are more popular among students who are under 18” does not match the chart’s age groups, and “600 higher than any other classes” confuses the under-11 ballet total with a difference. The overview also repeats selected details rather than clearly summarising the main pattern across all dance types. To strengthen the response, state that under-11s favour ballet, while 11–16-year-olds favour modern, and compare the tap figures more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on locations, a paragraph on dance types, and a concluding overview. This makes the information easy to follow, and transitions such as “Moving further” and “Lastly” signal progression. However, the final overview repeats points already made, and some links between ideas are mechanical rather than showing the relationship between the figures. For example, the ballet comparison and the statement about tap are placed together without clearly explaining the contrast between age groups. The reference “the given two age groups” is also not especially clear. Grouping the bar-chart comparisons by age group, and using direct comparisons such as “whereas” or “by contrast,” would create smoother progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing charts, including “proportion,” “negligible difference,” and “in contrast.” These choices show an attempt to vary your language beyond basic descriptions. Some expressions, however, are inaccurate or unnatural for this task. “The private studios are the highest” would be clearer as “private studios account for the largest share,” while “its strength is 600 higher” does not naturally describe student numbers. “Occupy more space” also suggests physical area rather than the proportion of classes. These word-choice and collocation issues do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, but they reduce precision. Prefer standard chart language such as “account for,” “number of students,” and “was more popular.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses linked with “while,” “whereas,” and “if compared to.” Most of the meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions are present. For example, “the private studios are the highest, which is 48%” has an unclear relative clause, and “the modern classes students who are under 11 accounts for 300” has faulty word order and subject–verb agreement. The phrase “children of age below eleven” is also not a natural grammatical construction. Aim for direct sentence patterns, such as “Private studios account for 48%” and “Under-11 students take 300 modern classes.” Checking agreement and clause structure would improve accuracy while preserving your sentence variety.

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