Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the bar charts illustrates the information on the location of dance classes young people in a city in australia are currently attending.
Overall, It is clear that private studios has most dance classes than other three classes, and also college based studios have the most lowest dance classes in the given period.
On the one hand, location of dance classes has four parts and the first one is private studios who the highest classes of all time which are 48%, and the second highest are school halls which are 24%, however, community halls has the second lowest data which is 10% and the lowest part of the period.
on the other hand, number of students which perfect in dance classes in ages group ballet was highest group on under 11 which is 600 student and 11-16 group has 300 students, also tap has second place in dance classes under 11 are 470 students and 11-16 are 420 students, last one is modern group which have 520 students in 11-16 and under 11 have 300.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify the two chart topics and report several relevant figures, including the 48% share for private studios and the age-group figures for ballet and modern. However, some key information is misreported: community halls and other account for 18%, not 10%, while college-based studios are the smallest category at 10%. The overview also says private studios have the most classes, rather than clearly summarising the main pattern across both charts. The comparisons between age groups are useful, but the tap figures are slightly inaccurate and the main contrasts could be stated more clearly—for example, younger students favour ballet, whereas older students favour modern. This leaves parts of the task only partially and unevenly covered.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate sections for the location and age-group charts. Phrases such as “On the one hand” and “on the other hand” signal a shift between topics. However, progression within the paragraphs is difficult to follow because several comparisons are packed into long, loosely connected sentences. The location paragraph is especially confusing: it calls community halls the second-lowest category but gives the wrong percentage, then describes it as the lowest. Some linking expressions are also used mechanically rather than to show a precise relationship. Organise each chart’s details in a clear order and use shorter sentences to make comparisons easier to track.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “students,” “highest,” and “lowest,” so the reader can generally understand the topic. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “most dance classes,” “the most lowest dance classes,” and “number of students which perfect in dance classes.” Repetition of “group,” “classes,” and “highest” also makes the description less precise. Choose vocabulary that describes the data directly: categories “account for” a share, while student numbers are “higher” or “lower” in a particular style. More accurate collocations and a wider range of comparison language would make the report clearer and more appropriate for an academic chart summary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify the intended comparisons. However, errors are frequent, and some longer structures are difficult to follow. For example, “the bar charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “private studios has” and “community halls has” repeat this problem. Articles and sentence construction are also unreliable in phrases such as “the lowest part of the period” and “number of students which perfect in dance classes.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the capital letter in “It” after the opening sentence. Aim first for accurate, complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, then add more complex comparisons once those patterns are controlled.
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