Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart illustrates the information about the types of sites for dance sessions and pie graph shows the numbers of young people according to their age who are participating currently in a town in Australia.

Overall, private studios remains popular destination for dance participants all over the town in contrast, college based studios are least used by participants. While ballet classes are taken by students remains highest in number, specifically of 11 to 16 years older.

As we concern about different locations of dance classes nearly 48 percent of the classes occur in privates studios while half of its occur in school halls which are only allowed after school hours. 18 percent classs occur in community halls and other locations while just 10 percent occurs in college based studios

Furthermore, ballet type dance is done by around 600 students of 11 to 16 age group while only half number of these students partcipates who are younger than 11 years. The number of students specifically youner ones participated as approximately 450 and 300 in tap and modern type dances respectively. Older students of 11 to16 year age participated as round about 420 and 520 in tap and modern dance classes respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover both charts and include a useful overall comparison: private studios are the most common location, while college-based studios are the least common. You also report several figures for the dance styles, but the overview contains a significant misreading: ballet is highest among under-11s, not among 11–16-year-olds. The detailed figures then say older students number about 300 in ballet, compared with 600 younger students. The location comparison is also inaccurate: school halls account for 24%, not “half” of the private-studio share. These errors, together with limited comparison between age groups, mean the main features are only partly and unevenly reported. Check each figure against the chart and make the overview accurately summarise the strongest contrasts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for location and dance types. This helps the reader follow the two charts, and transitions such as “Furthermore” signal a move to the second set of data. However, some connections are unclear or mechanical. For example, “As we concern about different locations” does not clearly introduce the comparison, and the overview’s contrast between locations and ballet is difficult to follow. The final paragraph lists figures without clearly comparing the two age groups for each style. Use clearer topic sentences and organise the dance data by direct contrasts—for example, explain that younger students favour ballet, whereas older students favour modern dance.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “participants,” “locations,” “age group,” and “approximately,” so the reader can identify the subject and figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “popular destination,” “classes occur in privates studios,” and “ballet type dance is done.” Spelling errors, including “classs,” “partcipates,” and “youner,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling carefully. Phrases such as “account for,” “are held at,” and “students enrolled in ballet” would describe the data more naturally and help you avoid repeating “occur” and “participated.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the response is generally understandable. However, errors are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward or unclear. For example, “private studios remains” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “While ballet classes are taken by students remains highest in number” has a faulty clause structure. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “18 percent classs occur” and the final location sentence, which lacks a full stop. Build accuracy with straightforward comparative sentences before adding subordinate clauses. Check agreement, for example, “private studios remain,” and ensure each sentence has a clear subject and main verb.

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