Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart shows the location of dance classes, while the bar chart illustrates the types of dance classes attending by youth in Australia.

Overall, private studios almost cover half of the locations which is the highest propotion. Almost all of the dance classes are more likely by people under 11 except the modern one.

Firstly, the private studios almost cover half of the locations which is about 48% of the total, following that community halls and others forming 18%. The school halls and college based studios covers 24% and 10% respectively.

Finnaly, the people with age 11 to 16 likes ballet dance more making it reach 600 numbers of student and 300 students who are under 11. The number of people taking tap class is almost same for people under 11 and under 16, 450 students that are under 11 and 430 students who are between 11 and 16. The number of students for modern classes with age 11 to16 is 520 and for age under 11 is 300.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both charts and include several relevant figures, such as private studios at 48% and the shares for school halls and college-based studios. Your overview also identifies private studios as the largest location category and modern dance as more popular among older students. However, the overview’s claim that almost all classes are more popular with under-11s is inaccurate: older students have higher figures for modern, and also slightly higher figures for tap. There is a more significant data error in the ballet comparison: the response says 11–16-year-olds number 600 and under-11s 300, whereas the chart shows the reverse. Correcting this and making the key age-group contrasts clearer would make the summary more accurate and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the location and age-group data. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, progression is weakened by the repeated wording about private studios in both the overview and the first detail paragraph, and the final paragraph lists figures without a clear comparison-led sequence. Linking phrases such as “Firstly” and “Finally” are used, but they do not always show the relationship between the data. Organise the body around the two charts and compare the age groups consistently for each dance style; this would make the progression clearer and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “private studios,” “community halls,” “percentage,” and “students,” so the main subject is generally clear. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “forming 18%” and “reach 600 numbers,” but these combinations are not natural in this context. Several spelling errors, including “propotion” and “Finnaly,” also reduce accuracy. Choose precise reporting verbs and standard chart language: for example, say a category “accounts for” a share, and a figure “stands at” a number of students. Avoid repeating “people” when “students” or “participants” is more suitable. These improvements would make the vocabulary more accurate and appropriate for an academic summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “The pie chart shows … while the bar chart illustrates …” and the overview sentence beginning “Overall.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the school halls and college based studios covers” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “dance classes attending by youth” uses an incorrect passive construction. The sentence about ballet also has an unclear structure around “making it reach 600 numbers of student.” Check subject–verb agreement, use “attended by” or “taken by” where appropriate, and form comparisons with complete, parallel clauses. More consistently accurate sentence patterns would improve control.

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