Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of types of dance institutes on the locations, while the the bar chart shows different kind of sessions in two diffrent groups.

Overall, the most noticable feature of the first chart is that private studios accounted for the largest share, wheres college-based studios represented the smallest proportion. the second chart shows that number of students in ballet classes by under 11 age group was double than by 11 and 16 age group.

Looking first at the pie chart private studios ware recorded 48%, making it the highest category. This was followed by school halls, which stood at under a quarter. By compatison, community halls & other recorded 18% and the lowest part coverd by college-based studios, which is 10%.

Turning to the bar chart, under 11 age group peoples are joined ballet dance classes it almost 600 students, while only 300 students are enrolled in modern dance coching. meanwhile, 11 to 16 year old age groups are recorded at mordern group at 500

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios are the largest category at 48%, and college-based studios are the smallest at 10%. You also make a relevant comparison between ballet participation in the two age groups. However, the response covers the bar chart only partially: it mentions under-11 ballet and modern, and older students’ modern classes, but omits the tap figures and the older group’s ballet figure. The overview’s claim that under-11 ballet enrolment is double that of the older group is accurate, but the other key contrast—that older students favour modern while younger students favour ballet—is not clearly summarised. Develop the overview and report the main comparisons across all three dance styles.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two charts. Phrases such as “Looking first” and “Turning to the bar chart” help signal the shift between topics. However, progression becomes less clear in the final paragraph: it moves from under-11 ballet to modern, then to older students’ modern classes, without completing the comparisons or explaining how the figures relate. Some linking is also mechanical, and the final sentence is incomplete, ending after “at 500”. Organise the bar-chart details by age group or dance style, use clear comparisons between the groups, and ensure each paragraph develops a complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion”, “accounted for”, “share”, and “enrolled”, which helps communicate the data. There is also an attempt to vary wording rather than repeat “shows”. However, several inaccurate or misspelled choices reduce precision, such as “types of dance institutes on the locations”, “ware recorded”, “compatison”, and “coching”. “The lowest part covered by” is also an awkward way to describe a percentage. Use standard collocations for describing charts, such as “the proportion of classes held at each venue” and “accounted for the smallest share”. Check spelling carefully, and choose precise terms such as “students” or “participants” rather than “peoples”.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple statements and more developed comparisons, for example, “This was followed by school halls” and the sentence comparing ballet enrolment across age groups. However, errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms are frequent enough to make some parts difficult to follow. Examples include “the the bar chart”, “number of students … was double than”, and “under 11 age group peoples are joined”. The final clause, “11 to 16 year old age groups are recorded at mordern group at 500”, is incomplete and does not clearly express who the figure refers to. Practise complete subject–verb structures, accurate comparative forms (“twice as many as”), and consistent plural and article use. Proofread punctuation and capitalisation as well.

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