Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts illustrates the given information about the different location and types of dance classes in which young individuals participated in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Overall, the location of dance classes in which private studios made up the largest share and it was the most popular activity. College- based studios represented the least proportion. In types of classes in which Ballet recorded the highest proportion and Tap was the lowest proportion.

In pie chart the location of dance classes of private studios accounted for highest proportion at 48% and it was the most popular activity. School halls ( after-school) was the second largest proportion at 24% .Community halls & other was recorded as 18%.However College-based studios in which number of students participated in the least proportion at 10%.

In bar chart the different age groups of dance classes in which Ballet under 11 age group of students whose participation was high rather than 11-16 age groups whose number of students participation was low. In Modern the teenagers was more popular then under aged 11. In Tap the number of students participated in moderate in both aged students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios are largest at 48%, followed by school halls at 24%, while college-based studios are smallest at 10%. Your age-group comparisons also correctly state that under-11s favour ballet more than 11–16-year-olds, and that modern is more popular among the older group. This meets the task well, with some features reported clearly. However, the overview says ballet was the highest and tap the lowest overall, which is not a reliable summary of the age-group chart: the figures show different leading styles by age, and tap is not consistently the least popular. The bar-chart paragraph also omits the approximate figures and leaves the tap comparison vague. A more precise overview and a few key numbers would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the pie chart and bar chart. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes weakened by repeated framing such as “in which” and by awkward links between ideas. For example, the overview moves from location to class types, but its comparison of ballet and tap is unclear; the final paragraph then lists age-group patterns without a clear sequence or figures. Some punctuation spacing also makes transitions abrupt, as in “24% .Community halls” and “18%.However”. Use direct topic sentences and organise the bar-chart details by age group or dance style, with clear comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “largest share”, “least proportion”, “accounted for” and “participation”, so the reader can generally understand the subject and comparisons. There is also some attempt to vary wording rather than simply repeat the chart labels. However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise, such as calling dance classes “the most popular activity” and describing values as a “proportion” when the bar chart shows numbers of students. Phrases such as “participation was high rather than” and “moderate in both aged students” are difficult to interpret. Repeated use of “number of students” and “proportion” also limits flexibility. Choose vocabulary that matches the data type: percentages for locations and student numbers for dance styles, using natural comparison phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons between age groups, and the main message is usually recoverable. However, control is inconsistent, and several sentence patterns are faulty. The opening has a subject–verb agreement error (“charts illustrates”) and an incomplete construction (“in which … are currently attending”). The overview also joins clauses awkwardly: “the location … in which private studios made up the largest share”. In the final paragraph, “Ballet under 11 age group of students whose participation was high” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “teenagers was” has an agreement error. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistent. Build shorter, complete comparison sentences first, then add subordinate clauses only when their relationships are clear.

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