Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates, the locations of the dance classes including kids under 11 and the age group from 11-12. The bar chart given below shows three types of dance classes in a town in australia.

Overall, most of the dance classes took place in private studios wherease the lowest percentage of dance classes were held in college-based studios.Moreover, ballet dance were more common in individuals who were 11 or younger similarly the age group 11-16 usually took modern dance classes.

The percentage of private studios was the highest, at roughly 48%, while the school halls(after school) were used by around 24%. Meanwhile, community halls and college based studios were the least populer, at 18% and 10% respectively.

The bar chart shows, three types of dance classes one of them is ballet which is more common in kids aged under 11 as there were 600 students as compared to the group of 11-16 as they were 300. Additionally, the students who took tap classes were highest in younger children which was around 430 and 410 for 11-16.The age group 11-16 years were greatest in the modern dance class as there were 515 students wherase under 11 students were onlt 300.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify the main location pattern: private studios account for the largest share, while college-based studios have the smallest. You also compare the age groups across ballet, tap and modern, using relevant figures. The overview is useful, but it misstates the age range as “11-12” in the introduction, and its claim that ballet was more common among those aged 11 or younger conflicts with the chart: ballet is higher for under-11s, but the overview’s wording about the older group taking modern is broadly accurate. Tap is also higher among under-11s, though your figures are slightly different from the chart. To strengthen the response, ensure the overview accurately captures the key contrasts and report the age categories consistently; the main features are present, but some details are unclear or imprecise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the pie chart and bar chart. This helps the reader follow the two sources of information. However, progression within sentences is sometimes awkward, and linking words are used mechanically or inaccurately. For example, “Moreover” introduces another overview point without a clear relationship, while “similarly” does not fit the contrast between the age groups. Some sentences also run together, as in the comparison of tap figures, making the relationships between values less clear. Use a more consistent pattern—overview first, then grouped comparisons—and connect contrasts with precise terms such as “whereas” or “by comparison.” Check spacing after full stops and commas to make paragraphing and sentence boundaries easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to describe the charts, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “percentage,” and “students,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There is some useful variation in expressions such as “took place” and “were held.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “dance classes were the least popular” confuses the popularity of classes with the locations used, and “individuals who were 11 or younger” is unnecessarily awkward. Spelling errors such as “wherease,” “populer,” and “onlt” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language, for example “accounted for” when describing shares and “the number of students taking” when comparing categories. This would make the vocabulary more controlled and appropriate to an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “as compared to” and clauses introduced by “as.” The main information can usually be understood, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “The pie chart illustrates, the locations” has incorrect punctuation, and “ballet dance were” has a subject–verb agreement error. The sentence “the students who took tap classes were highest in younger children” is also structurally unclear, while missing spaces after full stops make sentence boundaries harder to read. Use a clear subject and verb in each comparison—for example, “More under-11s took ballet than 11–16-year-olds”—and check agreement, articles and punctuation. Greater control of these patterns would make your range of sentence forms more effective.

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