Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of the location of different dance classes (private studio, school halls, college-based studios and community hall and other), while the bar graph depicts the figure of young students are currently attending dance classes in Australia. The figures are measured in percentages and numbers.

Overall, the proportion of dance classes in private studios was highest then that of others, while other location account for smallest proportion. Meanwhile, the number of students attending classes increased in all age groups.

The data suggest that the location of dance classes in private studios, which represent almost a half to around 48%. Moreover, school halls account for nearly 24%, followed by community halls and other venues at 18%. College-based studios were utilized venue, accounting for just 10%.

It is evident that ballet attracts the highest number of students under the age of 11 with approximately 600 participants, significantly more then 11 to 16. In comparison, tap dance is relatively similar in both age groups to nearly 400 to 450 perticipate. However, modern dance was least popular option among chidren under 11, attracting approximately 300 participants, but age group 11 to 16 was higher to around 550 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both charts and identify several important comparisons: private studios are the largest location category at 48%, college-based studios the smallest at 10%, and ballet is strongest among under-11s while modern is strongest among 11–16-year-olds. This gives the report a relevant overview and supports the main figures. However, the overview says student numbers “increased in all age groups,” which suggests a change over time; the chart instead compares age groups and dance styles. Some comparisons are also imprecise: tap is about 450 versus 420, not simply “nearly 400 to 450,” and modern for older students is around 520 rather than 550. Clarifying these points and comparing the age groups more directly would make the coverage more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a clear sequence: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on locations, and a paragraph comparing dance styles by age. This makes the information easy to follow overall, and transitions such as “Meanwhile,” “In comparison,” and “However” help signal relationships. The overview’s claim that numbers “increased” is not a clear description of the chart’s age-group comparison, though, and the final paragraph moves between styles without consistently stating both figures. Some linking is also mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “account” and “approximately.” To strengthen progression, organise the final paragraph around direct comparisons—for example, contrast ballet figures first, then tap, then modern—and use references that make each age group unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of chart-reporting vocabulary, including “proportion,” “account for,” “participants,” “attracts,” and “least popular.” These choices generally communicate the data, and terms such as “significantly more” help express comparisons. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward: “the proportion of the location” is unclear, “were utilized venue” is not idiomatic, and “the figure of young students are currently attending” is imprecise. There are also spelling errors in “perticipate” and “chidren,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for natural, precise phrases such as “the share of classes held at each venue” and “the number of students attending each style.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “private studios, which represent almost a half” and a contrastive structure beginning “However.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the figure of young students are” has subject–verb disagreement, while “The data suggest that the location … which represent” leaves the sentence incomplete and mismatches the verb with its subject. “Ballet attracts … with approximately 600 participants, significantly more then 11 to 16” also lacks a clear grammatical comparison. Work on complete clauses, agreement, and comparative sentence patterns; these corrections would make your varied structures more controlled and easier to read.

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