Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pie chart and bar chart illustrates the information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australian are currently attending.

Overall, it is clearly visible that Private studios accounted for the largest share among all the other location, while college-based studios make up by lowest portion in all locations. In bar chart shows that Ballet dance classes have the largest number of children under 11 and moder dance classes have the least number of children under 11 years old.

In the location of the dance classes the largest portion is occupied by the private studios around the half of the portion among all the classes fallowed by 48%.

School halls classes stay at 24% of the total portion which is half of the private classes. Remaining 38% is accounted for the community halls and other & college-based studios which is followed by 18% and 10%.

In the Vallet type of dance classes, the biggest age group is Under 11 with 600 students. On the other hand, Modern dance classes have the largest number of students with 11-16 age group with more than 500 students.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location pattern accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, and college-based studios are the smallest at 10%. You also report the 24% for school halls and the remaining location figures. However, the overview of the bar chart is incomplete: it notes the highest and lowest groups for under-11s, but does not compare the two age groups across all three dance styles. The final paragraph gives only selected figures, omitting the under-11 tap and modern totals and the older group’s ballet and tap figures. Also, “the biggest age group is Under 11 with 600 students” confuses an age group with a dance-style total. A clearer overview and more balanced comparisons would make the key features more fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for the two charts. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression within the paragraphs is uneven: the overview moves from locations to only part of the age-group chart, and the final paragraph reports isolated comparisons rather than developing a clear account of the bar-chart data. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” are used, but the relationship they signal is not always precise. The location paragraph also repeats the idea of the largest share and uses “Remaining 38%” without clearly explaining that it combines two categories. Grouping the bar-chart comparisons systematically by age group or dance type would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “largest share,” “portion” and “students,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. “Largest portion is occupied by” and “fall owed by 48%” make the location description awkward, while “biggest age group” is not suitable for describing a total for ballet. There are also spelling errors, including “moder,” “Vallet” and “fallowed,” which reduce precision. Aim for accurate, varied terms such as “proportion,” “figure” and “enrolment,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish percentages, student numbers and age categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, errors occur frequently in sentence structure and agreement. For example, “The given pie chart and bar chart illustrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “In bar chart shows” is an incomplete construction. The overview sentence beginning “while college-based studios make up” also shifts tense from “accounted for.” Articles and plurals are inconsistent, as in “among all the other location,” and punctuation does not always separate ideas clearly. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and keep tense and number consistent. These corrections would make your comparisons easier to read.

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