Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart give information on the location and the bar chart give information about the types of dance classes by age group in a town in Australia.

The major contribution of the pie chart of the location of dance classes are private studios which means the 48% dance classes are in private studios and after it 24% contribution of pie chart is school halls, 18% contribution is community halls and other, and 10% contribution is college-based studios which plays a very least contribution in the location of the dance classes.

The students who do ballet dance are majorly those students whose are under 11 which means the number of students under 11 are more than the student whose age group is 11 to 16 in ballet dance. Same scenario is in the tap dance, under 11 student are more participating in tap dance irrespective of the 11 plus. In contrast, the number of students whose are in range of 11 and 16 are more participating in the modern dance instead of under 11. Ballet dance catch more attention from under 11 students but modern dance catch less attention from the under 11 students

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main location figures accurately: private studios are largest at 48%, followed by school halls at 24%, community halls and other venues at 18%, and college-based studios at 10%. You also make relevant age-group comparisons, correctly noting that under-11s lead in ballet and tap, while 11–16-year-olds lead in modern. However, the response does not give the bar-chart figures, and the comparison that under-11s participate more in tap is not supported: the chart shows about 450 under-11 students versus 420 in the older group, a small difference. There is also no clear overall summary bringing the strongest patterns together. Include key numbers and a concise overview to make the report more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces both charts, discusses locations, and then turns to dance types. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and linking phrases such as “In contrast” help signal a change in comparison. However, the information is not arranged into clearly developed paragraphs, and there is no distinct overview to guide the reader through the main patterns. Repeated wording such as “contribution” and “which means” makes the location paragraph feel mechanical, while “Same scenario” does not clearly explain the comparison that follows. Group the response into an introduction, overview, and detail paragraphs, and use concise links that show how each figure relates to the main trend.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “private studios,” “school halls,” “ballet,” “tap,” and “modern,” so the subject is generally clear. There are also attempts to describe comparisons through phrases such as “In contrast” and “more participating.” However, the range is limited and several expressions are unnatural or imprecise, including “major contribution,” “least contribution,” and “catch more attention.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning less direct, particularly when describing proportions or student numbers. Use standard chart-reporting language and vary it carefully: for example, say that a venue “accounts for” a share, or that a group “has more students taking” a style. Avoid repeating the same comparison wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and comparisons, but grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors occur often enough to make parts of the response awkward. For example, “The pie chart give” has subject–verb disagreement, while “the number of students under 11 are more” uses an incorrect verb pattern. In “students whose are in range of 11 and 16,” the relative structure is faulty, and several sentences join multiple ideas without clear punctuation. Most meanings can still be understood, but these errors reduce clarity. Practise accurate simple comparison structures first, then extend them with clauses such as “whereas” or “while.” Check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries during proofreading.

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