Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart compare to information on the location and types and dance classes young people in atown in Australia are currently attending .

Overall, The dance classes had different location and different types. There are three types of dance classes. Private studio is jump into and College - based studios is decline .

Illustrate , The private studio are most popular location of dance class .accounting for 48% for all dance classes. the second common venue is school halls ( after school) at 24% .Community hall and other location make up 18% of dance class which is less . the least common location is college- based studios 10%.

For type of dance class is ballet 600 number of student under 11 but 300 students is under age 11-16

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the main location figures accurately: private studios are the largest share at 48%, followed by school halls at 24%, while college-based studios are lowest at 10%. However, the response covers the dance-type chart only minimally: it reports two ballet figures, and even the age description is unclear, while tap and modern are omitted. The overview also says private studios “jump into” and college studios “is decline,” suggesting changes over time that the charts do not show. The task requires a summary of both charts, so select the key comparisons across all three dance styles and both age groups, and avoid unsupported trends. The response is also 22 words below the required minimum, limiting the detail you can provide.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response begins with an introduction, gives an overview, and then discusses locations before turning to dance types. This helps the reader recognise the broad sections. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph stops after one comparison and does not develop the second chart. Linking and punctuation are also inconsistent; for example, “Illustrate ,” does not clearly connect the next point, and several sentences run together around the location figures. Use clear paragraphing for the two charts, then group related comparisons within each paragraph. Simple links such as “whereas” and “by contrast” would make the comparisons easier to follow without relying on isolated labels.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounting for,” “most popular location,” “second common venue,” and “least common.” These phrases show an attempt to describe proportions and rank categories. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate enough to make the meaning less clear, such as “jump into,” “is decline,” and “make up 18% of dance class.” There is also repetition of “location” and “dance class.” Build a small set of accurate terms for describing shares and comparisons, and use the chart’s category names consistently. More precise wording would make the report clearer and more appropriate for an academic summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the response attempts an overview and comparisons, but grammatical control is uneven. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in examples such as “The chart compare” and “Private studio are most popular location.” The final sentence, “300 students is under age 11-16,” also has an unclear structure that makes the age comparison difficult to understand. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are frequently inconsistent, including “a town” written as “atown” and spaces around commas. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check singular/plural agreement and articles. A few accurate comparative structures would also help express the chart data more clearly.

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